Space Mermaids -- Blue's intro
Tue, Mar. 6th, 2007 23:33I realize I need to finish the latest Liadan-POV part I posted, but ehhhn, I still need to figure out plotty stuff first. Anyway, at the moment the main problems I have with this story are in the general plot; I'm not even trying to imagine too many specific scenes just yet.
Writing fanfic has made me totally unable to introduce new characters and places properly. I realize this intro scene is lacking, but I don't have a good grip on Blue's voice yet and I can't come up with ways to describe the characters and settings in a way that doesn't feel like irrelevant info-dumping. Nnngh. ~__~
If anything really needs to be expanded on, please point it out? and if you have a suggestion on where in the scene I could insert it, I will love you forever. (I need to describe Kalden more, for instance. But WHERE can I sneak it in? not a clue.)
Plz also tell me what kind of impression you get from the characters? ;_;
( Space Mermaids -- Blue )
Writing fanfic has made me totally unable to introduce new characters and places properly. I realize this intro scene is lacking, but I don't have a good grip on Blue's voice yet and I can't come up with ways to describe the characters and settings in a way that doesn't feel like irrelevant info-dumping. Nnngh. ~__~
If anything really needs to be expanded on, please point it out? and if you have a suggestion on where in the scene I could insert it, I will love you forever. (I need to describe Kalden more, for instance. But WHERE can I sneak it in? not a clue.)
Plz also tell me what kind of impression you get from the characters? ;_;
( Space Mermaids -- Blue )