Sun, May. 11th, 2008

askerian: icon of sakura dragging naruto and sasuke by the hand, saying shut up, i am seme tonight (T7_Sakura Seme)
http://askerian.livejournal.com/384832.html#cutid1 => Previous part. It's the one where they disembark on the island. (Though I'm thinking of inserting a quick NaruSaku scene between the two, since they would be alone together for a while. I have no clue WTF could happen, though, so I'm taking suggestions.)

This wasn't betaread, I just read it over once when I was done typing it, so there's no doubt a lot of improvements to make. Please tell me if the grammar/syntax/typos bug you, or the characterization, or =ESPECIALLY THIS ONE=> you can't visualise a scene properly. It's got a fight scene in there and the least I can say is that I'm not used to writing them.

Or you could just say stuff like "what the hell took you so long." That would work too. plz loev me. .__.

Sasuke scene 2 )

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