Scene
still not complete, but ehh.
Sunfreak gave me good concrit about the feelings and POV and stuff, so I tried to edit a bit, but I could only sneak in a few more small details and I'm not sure it works well enough. It's meant to be kinda confusing --
Naruto is confused, and besides it's a mindscape battle, the laws of logic and reality don't really apply -- but it shouldn't be TOO confusing, and besides I don't know how to crank up the emotional impact. If you have any suggestions at all, specific bits that worked or didn't work for you, pleasepleaseplease give them. ;__;
( He arrived too late, bis repetitae )
askerian: now i have to find a way to get them to have sex.
askerian: fuck.
rayemars: *snerk*
rayemars: *points and laughs*
askerian: *HATES*
rayemars: ...okay, maybe I should be more supportive, but still. Ha!
askerian: ;_; *emos*
rayemars: *pet pet* I laugh because I empathize.
rayemars: Really.
askerian: >.>
rayemars: I believe that you can do it!
rayemars: If it's possible to get Sasuke into Orochimaru's bed, it's even more possible for him to get into Sakura and Naruto's!
askerian: yeah, but not really
askerian: see, Sasuke likes to be a martyr.
rayemars: And Naruto likes to kick him in the ass when he is.
askerian: He'd hate it with Orochimaru, therefore it's a lot more likely to happen.
rayemars: ...Okay, point taken.
askerian: mmmsasulogic
sarolynne: That is so very true. Ah Sasuke. Why is it easiest to picture you having sex with people you hate? XD (And really easiest with people you love AND hate.)
askerian: this goes on lj.
rayemars: ....
askerian: >D
askerian: no? ._.
rayemars: Ah, hell, it's not like nothing said isn't dead true.