Fri, Mar. 16th, 2007

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Fri, Mar. 16th, 2007 09:02
askerian: Serious Karkat in a red long-sleeved shirt (T7_Sasu And miles to go before I sleep)
okay so if you saw a teamwork bit and you don't anymore, it's because I just friendslocked it. I shouldn't post when i'm dead tired. ~__~ It more than probably needs a lot more details and fleshing out and stuff, and right now I really can't work up the brainpower to do that. So um sorry. Will fix it tomorrow, promise. right now i sleep. x_x
askerian: Serious Karkat in a red long-sleeved shirt (T7_Sasu And miles to go before I sleep)
Scene still not complete, but ehh.

Sunfreak gave me good concrit about the feelings and POV and stuff, so I tried to edit a bit, but I could only sneak in a few more small details and I'm not sure it works well enough. It's meant to be kinda confusing -- Naruto is confused, and besides it's a mindscape battle, the laws of logic and reality don't really apply -- but it shouldn't be TOO confusing, and besides I don't know how to crank up the emotional impact. If you have any suggestions at all, specific bits that worked or didn't work for you, pleasepleaseplease give them. ;__;

He arrived too late, bis repetitae )


[livejournal.com profile] askerian: now i have to find a way to get them to have sex.
[livejournal.com profile] askerian: fuck.
[livejournal.com profile] rayemars: *snerk*
[livejournal.com profile] rayemars: *points and laughs*
[livejournal.com profile] askerian: *HATES*
[livejournal.com profile] rayemars: ...okay, maybe I should be more supportive, but still. Ha!
[livejournal.com profile] askerian: ;_; *emos*
[livejournal.com profile] rayemars: *pet pet* I laugh because I empathize.
[livejournal.com profile] rayemars: Really.
[livejournal.com profile] askerian: >.>
[livejournal.com profile] rayemars: I believe that you can do it!
[livejournal.com profile] rayemars: If it's possible to get Sasuke into Orochimaru's bed, it's even more possible for him to get into Sakura and Naruto's!
[livejournal.com profile] askerian: yeah, but not really
[livejournal.com profile] askerian: see, Sasuke likes to be a martyr.
[livejournal.com profile] rayemars: And Naruto likes to kick him in the ass when he is.
[livejournal.com profile] askerian: He'd hate it with Orochimaru, therefore it's a lot more likely to happen.
[livejournal.com profile] rayemars: ...Okay, point taken.
[livejournal.com profile] askerian: mmmsasulogic

[livejournal.com profile] sarolynne: That is so very true. Ah Sasuke. Why is it easiest to picture you having sex with people you hate? XD (And really easiest with people you love AND hate.)

[livejournal.com profile] askerian: this goes on lj.
[livejournal.com profile] rayemars: ....
[livejournal.com profile] askerian: >D
[livejournal.com profile] askerian: no? ._.
[livejournal.com profile] rayemars: Ah, hell, it's not like nothing said isn't dead true.

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