(original) Cercle ficlet thing

So almost no one's going to fully appreciate what's going on, because the main story is in french and I only told what happens to very few people. It's a present for joisbishmyoga, though, and she can't read french.

Reiyel: Black-haired, smirky, smug, annoying sexy omnisexual pervert. (usually a dark angel. but not today. don't ask.) Currently wants to bone Askerian.

Askerian: Palomino, curly-haired, energetic, grumpy and mildly homophobic telepathic, shapeshifting unicorn. Doesn't want to be boned. Doesn't even want to do the boning. Is STRAIGHT, thank you very much.

( the drabble-thing )

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( ... aaand a second one. XD;;;; damn it, i'm falling back into that world. )

T_T

omg I just tried to read my old original fic, sorta toying with the idea of rewriting it, and IT SUCKS. I mean, there are little details I really love, and some things that still make me laugh, and the characters, I miss them. And yeah, yeah, some of the scenes were pretty awesome. *buffs nails*

But it doesn't change the facts that:

-my writing was so awkward in places that I cringe when I read it again.

-Too much infodump, not enough stumbling over things people didn't know about,

-Alizea is a Sue. She's a half-angel who didn't know that she wasn't human!!, buried in pretty boys up to her neck (but she only wants one of them ohnoez), no one understands her pain, and she eventually becomes an archangel. (and omg so self-righteous. ack.)

-Ashram himself is pretty empty -- standard "hot, dangerous guy your parents warned you about, but still a nice guy underneath".

-Drao is pretty useless to the story, also he doesn't have enough issues seeing the sort of tragic past i gave him.

-I have all these species and all these customs, and yet most of my characters react to things just like humans would. THEY'RE NOT. (okay, the werewolf does react like a wolf most of the time) It's a waste of worldbuilding.

-Things in the background go too easy. They never have problems because they have no legal ID, for one thing. Alizea can't invite five 15-to-20 year old guys to live with her because she lives with her eeeevil uncle? BAM, she inherits a house from her old mentor who conveniently just keeled over. No legal problems from the grandsons either -- and the house is in perfect shape, with a bazillion rooms. HN. no.)


It really shows that I started writing that as a teenager. But I still love it...

So I want to rewrite it. Oh boy.

( more babble about how to fix that mess )