(naruto) ficlety thing - Rustlings in the Night

I am so going to hell for that one. XD

( R for suggestive and underage )

I know the scene ends a bit abruptly. I don't know if it's finished or if it's not, but ehh, i can't find anything else to happen. I had vague ideas to turn that into a Team 7 thing, but they died on me. ;_;

(naruto) meh ... *worry*

I've had several comments about how Naruto was a little bit OOC -- not in the scene I just posted, but in Teamwork in general. At first I was all *shrug* because, hey, everyone has a different interpretation of the characters, and everyone is going to be OOC for SOMEONE.

But this is the six or seventh time I've been told so. They didn't even say that they didn't like him like I write him, but still, he's ooc for them.

I can't see it, but then I'm writing him older (that and i've never had an easy time getting into his head, contrary to sasuke or sakura), so is it just that he's a bit more mature and they can't recognize loveable-brat!12yearold!naruto, or is it something else? It really bothers me. ;__;

I'm not searching for "Oh, of course not, you write him so well, even better than Kishimoto himself!!!!" replies (my ego is quite big enough as it is and does not fear a few little bruises, thank you XD), i'm asking for your honest opinion here, people. I like the way I write him, and i'm probably not going to change him all that much, even if he IS ooc (unless people raise a valid point about how, no, the ooc-ness can absolutely NOT be attributed to a difference of interpretation -- in which case I shall edit a lot), but having people see something in my fic that I can't say I put here consciously bothers me.

(teamwork) another scene from chapter 4

It actually comes before the kissies, but i wanted to copy the kissies first because, well, kissies versus awkward dad/sakura conversation... heh.

I need a name for daddy Haruno. Mom's name is Hana (flower). Dad has a bad limp, is really quiet and thinks too much, and his hair is silvery white -- he was born like that. I was thinking Yuki at first, so his name could mean spring snow XD but i'm not sure. I mean, for me Yuki is the prettyboy in fruits baskets. ._.; I need an old, distinguished man's name. *siigh* suggestions plz?
edit: dad's name is now Yukihiro. *purrpurr*

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