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RAR!! *determined!!*
(no reason for the icon, just felt like Itachi today and the only pretty face icons I have of him have mean things written on it. XD)
Today, I rewrite Teamwork.
Well, the first chapter, at least.
... if I can stop cringing long enough to actually dwell on it. ~__~;;;
I'm not going to ask people to re-read it just so they can help me, but if anyone remembers something they wondered about back then, or some scene that was too long or not enough or a little awkward or whatever, I will love you forever and ever. ♥
(and yes, the Anko thing is one of the problems I'll try to fix. It sounds like bashing and nnngh. *annoyed at self*)
... gnnh, i hate rewriting. ~___~
Today, I rewrite Teamwork.
Well, the first chapter, at least.
... if I can stop cringing long enough to actually dwell on it. ~__~;;;
I'm not going to ask people to re-read it just so they can help me, but if anyone remembers something they wondered about back then, or some scene that was too long or not enough or a little awkward or whatever, I will love you forever and ever. ♥
(and yes, the Anko thing is one of the problems I'll try to fix. It sounds like bashing and nnngh. *annoyed at self*)
... gnnh, i hate rewriting. ~___~
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And Sasuke's attitude toward Iruka seems a bit... well strong is too harsh, but it he seems to have something more than just "this ninja is below my level and not worthy of attention" going on. I wouldn't say dislike precisely, but definitely more disdain that I would expect of Sasuke toward someone that is basically irrelevant to him. About all I could come up with for a reason was very subconscious jealousy over Iruka and Naruto's relationship, that and being in pain and generally grumpy.
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(he's kinda torn between "why does naruto get to have someone who loves him like family" (hello blind guy) and "I don't want THAT as my family anyway, but no, it's not really conscious, he just chalks it up to annoyance that some guy he doesn't respect much gets to actually be important to the three of them. That's the same reason he's twitchy with Sakura's parents.)
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Ah, I always figured the twitchiness with the parentals was due to the whole "these two know I fucked their daughter and got her pregnant and Sakura will be so pissed if I make them mad" thing.