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RAR!! *determined!!*
(no reason for the icon, just felt like Itachi today and the only pretty face icons I have of him have mean things written on it. XD)
Today, I rewrite Teamwork.
Well, the first chapter, at least.
... if I can stop cringing long enough to actually dwell on it. ~__~;;;
I'm not going to ask people to re-read it just so they can help me, but if anyone remembers something they wondered about back then, or some scene that was too long or not enough or a little awkward or whatever, I will love you forever and ever. ♥
(and yes, the Anko thing is one of the problems I'll try to fix. It sounds like bashing and nnngh. *annoyed at self*)
... gnnh, i hate rewriting. ~___~
Today, I rewrite Teamwork.
Well, the first chapter, at least.
... if I can stop cringing long enough to actually dwell on it. ~__~;;;
I'm not going to ask people to re-read it just so they can help me, but if anyone remembers something they wondered about back then, or some scene that was too long or not enough or a little awkward or whatever, I will love you forever and ever. ♥
(and yes, the Anko thing is one of the problems I'll try to fix. It sounds like bashing and nnngh. *annoyed at self*)
... gnnh, i hate rewriting. ~___~
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Somewhere after the seventh real paragraph down, after Sakura's stopped admiring (in a horrified way Naruto) 'As for the tips of her ears, 'they were' already burning.'
A little further on, can someone fall off a futon? They're really close to the ground anyway. Maybe he can roll off?
Oh hey! If I leave my cursor over the english words the french translation appears, how cool is that?
Hum nothing else for the first chapter, sorry for the nitpicking.
I always thought Sakura needed to be more pissed overall and a little more argh my life is ruined because she'd fallen pregnant in the story, I'd been devastated, men of my life or not. Otherwise I'll go over the other chapters later.