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teamwork -- talking to myself >_>;;
Okay so I didn't actually write today but Chapter 8 and 9 of teamwork 3 are already all outlined! Now I just have to...
... write the f**ing fight scenes...
*vaguely tempted to just skip to the aftermath* T^T
Not too sure which POV to use either. Naruto is due for some of that hot POV action, but he's still half-crazy with Kyuuroars so he wouldn't make a good POV person outside of short scenelets and he'd miss half of the action for being so focused on his own thing. (also kyuuroar!crazyruto is REALLY hard to write.) I think I'm gonna alternate between Sakura and Sasuke because there's some stuff going through Sasuke's head I don't think a Sakura POV could convey properly, but also there's stuff happening to her that he's not here for.
I could just let them share chapter 8, but in chapter 9 there's YET more of that "needs to be from sasuke or sakura's POV"... Poor Naruto, I can slip you a little not entirely necessary (and completely depressing) scene but that's it. You'll get chapter 10, I promise, and if you're luckyand my muse doesn't chicken out again there might even be a lemon in there! :DDDD;;
... *goes to outline chapter 10 as well* >_________>
... write the f**ing fight scenes...
*vaguely tempted to just skip to the aftermath* T^T
Not too sure which POV to use either. Naruto is due for some of that hot POV action, but he's still half-crazy with Kyuuroars so he wouldn't make a good POV person outside of short scenelets and he'd miss half of the action for being so focused on his own thing. (also kyuuroar!crazyruto is REALLY hard to write.) I think I'm gonna alternate between Sakura and Sasuke because there's some stuff going through Sasuke's head I don't think a Sakura POV could convey properly, but also there's stuff happening to her that he's not here for.
I could just let them share chapter 8, but in chapter 9 there's YET more of that "needs to be from sasuke or sakura's POV"... Poor Naruto, I can slip you a little not entirely necessary (and completely depressing) scene but that's it. You'll get chapter 10, I promise, and if you're lucky
... *goes to outline chapter 10 as well* >_________>
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Skip it. But don't ignore it fully. Skim over it. It's something I do when I'm stuck with an idea about how to write something.... and often times stuff half writes it'self.
Like...
Adam and Steve fight. Adam's a bit of a traditionalist, so his moves are very blunt and seemingly straight forward. Steve seems to be getting ahead because of his unconventional moves, but every time he seems to be almost there, Adam manages to cut him off. Steve is getting more and more frustrated as a result, and starts to get a bit sloppy. Adam waits for the right moment... As Steve lunges out in a move that had worked as a finishing move earlier in the story against Big Bad Guy, but leaves himself completely open, Adam strikes, his fist crashing into Steve's stomach so hard that Steve sees white. For a moment it's uncertain.... then Steve crumples down in to the ground, curling around his bruised belly. Adam stands over him, panting in triumph, then leans down a bit stiffly to brush a bit of hair back from Steve's face, "idiot... if I'd had a knife you would have been killed... was it really worth the risk?"
Or similar... you get a rough outline of the action... without worrying about dressing it up in pretty language. You get a bit of an idea of how, exactly, it turns out, so you can use it later, and if you're lucky you get a semi-detailed rough outline.
the point is to remove the pressure of "must make it long, must make it pretty and action-packed." and if you scene ends up being "adam and Steve fight. Adam's a traditionalist, and steve is too emotional, and adam takes advantage of him when he's angry, and lays him out flat" then at least you've got the scene firmly outlined too.
just a thought.
But then, I've always been horrible at sammarizing things. They always end up longer then the original :p
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"I swing at you with my Sword of Smiting +3!"
"Yawn. I dodge, and counter attack. Boring."
"well.. i evade with style and grace and"
"...and provoke an attack of opportunity. I step forward, and punch you in the stomach."
"... shit. .... and I'm out of hit points. Damnit! I fall to the ground and clutch my stomach, you jerk."
"I kick your sword away from your hand and lean down and gloat. Silly Paladin!"
No? Oh well.. XD
And hey, whine away. I think I've commented enough to show that I just like coming up with ways to be helpful... even if they don't actually help, it makes me think a bit myself and that's always awesome :D
I know you'll get it eventually :D
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AAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
How you could possibly think that was an "oh please" instead of an (see all-caps above), I Do Not Know. Holy Cliffhanger, Iruka!!1!!
As for your current concerns, I say, write the dialogue first, then (unless it kills your current ideas) think about writing the fight around it? Hell, the manga/anime does that all the time: "Ah, you see my pose is different now... Wait... Is that a HUGE SPIDER YOU'RE DROPPING ON MY HEAD EW EW EW ok wait, I'm a Hyuuga, Must Reassemble Coolness..." -etc.
Sword of Smiting +3 just gets Naru and Sasuke right back into making snotty penis-size jokes at each other.
Which, come to think, might not be a bad way to take the advantage of surprise away from their opponents...
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ooh, that's a really good idea -- dialogue first. Sometimes it's impacted by the action though... Hmmm. But still a good starting point. Thank you. ^^
*snicker*
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If you don't call that icon DANCE MY PUPPETS, DANCE, you really should.
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