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askerian ([personal profile] askerian) wrote2007-07-02 06:40 am

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... Finally accepting that I'm gonna have to rewrite/tweak Crossed Wires from the start if I want it to get anywhere.

I dun wannaaaaaaaa I'm too lazyyyyyy... But that story really is doing a lot of shiny and not a lot of plotty. It's got nine chapters and plot happens in maybe three or four of them! D: And I didn't foreshadow things I should have, and some reactions don't make sense with the new character backstories and stuff like that.

... But I'm lazyyyy...
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[identity profile] joisbishmyoga.livejournal.com 2007-07-03 04:01 am (UTC)(link)
Do you have any cyberpunk fic recs aside from Crossed Wires? Doesn't have to be in Naruto fandom. I've only ever found a couple, and I do like what little I've read of the genre.

(Anonymous) 2007-07-06 12:07 am (UTC)(link)
There's another one, with Deidare, incomplete, but good so far - let me get back to you on the title and author. Otherwise, I haven't come across any more cyperpunk fics. (maybe there should be a comm for Naruto cyberpunk AUs - cool little subgenre of fanfic)
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[identity profile] lukita.livejournal.com 2007-07-02 06:42 am (UTC)(link)
But but but, pretty bot! And fluffy!Naruto.

One of the dangers of writing fics while the original sources is still going on, my suggestion is that you can only try to incorporate as much as possible and forget the rest. Most people won't look too closely at things unless some characterazation say Character A hates red heads and would kill them on sight, then you fic Character A falling in love with one because of their pretty red hair.
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[identity profile] lukita.livejournal.com 2007-07-02 07:54 am (UTC)(link)
Awww... Pretty bot just doesn't like to do whatever you want him to. Could he be not wondering what else is going on because he can't see there's somthing funny going on with Naruto?
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[personal profile] tephra 2007-07-02 03:11 pm (UTC)(link)
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So why would Itachi want to kill Orochimaru? Can't be a Sasuke-related reason because when it starts Oro doesn't even know Sasuke exists.

I suppose that depends on why Itachi wiped out the other Uchiha. If he did it because of some flaw he perceived in them then it might be possible that Orochimaru was behind that flaw. Since I have no idea what sort of background you have for Orochimaru other than apparently working at Hyuuga Corp at some point I can't really help much.

Though it's obvious that Hyuuga Corp has some biomedical stuff going on, maybe they developed the Uchiha? Possibly Orochimaru was working on a way to become "immortal" by downloading a person's lifetime experience and knowledge into a blank Uchiha and Itachi discovered that fact?

Maybe Itachi is a failed attempt at that download process and that's why he went nuts. If someone decided they liked the way Itachi developed they might have copied his specs for Sasuke which would give Itachi a reason not to destroy him and a way for Orochimaru not to know about him (and to become interested in him later if you want to go that way).
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[identity profile] lukita.livejournal.com 2007-07-02 03:34 pm (UTC)(link)
Humm... Is Orochimaru the mad-scientist type? Given how much canon Orochimaru is obsess about their bloodline limit, maybe it have something to do with that?

[identity profile] phoenix-melody.livejournal.com 2007-07-02 01:40 pm (UTC)(link)
...well, you've got me for one more night before I go home. I'd be happy to do more listening/plot helpingness while I pack. XD;

[identity profile] phoenix-melody.livejournal.com 2007-07-02 02:37 pm (UTC)(link)
You should--I don't leave until tomorrow afternoon. Tonight's just my last night here.

And when you wake, Spaz and I have posted the first log in [livejournal.com profile] fatedthreads. We've set it up so people can comment on logs. Hope you like it.

[identity profile] mika-kun.livejournal.com 2007-07-03 03:23 am (UTC)(link)
*de-lurks*

I don't usually comment much, but I love CW so much (I've read and re-read it at least 3 times start to finish), that I figured I should tell you. Might help give you the motivation and desire to fiddle with it. Or not. Either way I thought I should let you know.

One of my favourite aspects of the fic is how there's just a slightly different feel to the Naruto and Sasuke bits then there is the the Neji bits. Neji feels just a little bit more desperate and trapped.

I also can't wait to find out Naruto's back story, you've dropped quite a few very interesting hints that point to Naruto having his alterations done at a very young age, and I really want to know the details.

[identity profile] ktoth04.livejournal.com 2007-07-03 11:45 pm (UTC)(link)
dont be laaaaaazy :(

if u r lazy, there is no more fic, and i will be all sad like :(

:)