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... Finally accepting that I'm gonna have to rewrite/tweak Crossed Wires from the start if I want it to get anywhere.

I dun wannaaaaaaaa I'm too lazyyyyyy... But that story really is doing a lot of shiny and not a lot of plotty. It's got nine chapters and plot happens in maybe three or four of them! D: And I didn't foreshadow things I should have, and some reactions don't make sense with the new character backstories and stuff like that.

... But I'm lazyyyy...

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Thank you, I'm glad you like it so much. #^___^# (... are you sure you meant Deidara? As in the blond Akatsuki with the funny eye and the "un"? ^^; I don't use any Akatsuki members in CW except from Itachi and Orochimaru, really. But then I did mention or use many characters I haven't named yet and that's rather confusing since they're not described in depth at all. XD;; )

The smut's going to be rather slow in coming, sadly. Stupid no-hormones Sasuke. ~___~

As for Saki, I kind of dislike how Naruto is OOC in it -- it's really weird when the crossdresser is more IC than the other guy D: It's still great that other people like it though. XD; But if it's so different from my usual fics, it's most probably because I wrote it to fit a friend's tastes, and I do know her well enough to tell what will make her happy. XD The universe -- ehh, I think all the people writing Saki-fic already explored everything there was to explore, so I'm not in any hurry to touch it again.

Thanks for the comment again! *squishloves*

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XD It's okay.

He's probably gonna get fed up with Sasuke's "eh, maybe tomorrow" about the boy bits and install them at the same time as the new arm or something.

Naruto: Yay, calibrating time!!
Sasuke: ... DIE.

... XD;;; the problem for me is that his main OOC-ness happens when he's not pretending, IE when he more or less forces himself on Sasuke in the first fic. Of course Sasuke is the kind who says no when he means yes, and he eventually got off on being able to enjoy it while giving Naruto the responsibility, but Naruto had no way to really know that because Sasuke didn't show it at all, at first, and yet Naruto never hesitated much. It bothered me. ;__;

The second fic was pure naughtiness so it doesn't really matter as much. XD I like the third fic well enough, though.

Naruto and Sasuke have never really interacted in a healthy way in canon, either. They seem to communicate best with their fists. Like they could actually, you know, SPEAK! *gasp* In teamwork they'll eventually calm down and get a little better about the misunderstandings and lack of communication, but lots of their communication will still happen non-verbally. They just don't talk about their feelings much. (naruto is less I HAVE NO FEELINGS AND THEREFORE DONT INSULT ME BY THINKING I MIGHT about it, but since Sasuke is so reserved, it's hard to talk to him about them. He gets defensive and embarrassed and he clams up. You've got to ambush him or something. XD So Naruto talks about his feelings with Sakura but not with Sasuke, because he knows Sasuke will be uncomfortable and therefore bitchy.)

*squish squish* ♥♥♥

Do you have any cyberpunk fic recs aside from Crossed Wires? Doesn't have to be in Naruto fandom. I've only ever found a couple, and I do like what little I've read of the genre.

There's another one, with Deidare, incomplete, but good so far - let me get back to you on the title and author. Otherwise, I haven't come across any more cyperpunk fics. (maybe there should be a comm for Naruto cyberpunk AUs - cool little subgenre of fanfic)

But but but, pretty bot! And fluffy!Naruto.

One of the dangers of writing fics while the original sources is still going on, my suggestion is that you can only try to incorporate as much as possible and forget the rest. Most people won't look too closely at things unless some characterazation say Character A hates red heads and would kill them on sight, then you fic Character A falling in love with one because of their pretty red hair.

That's not the problem with Crossed Wires and never really was, though- - the problem is that I had a world, and backstory for tons of people, and that I knew what happened backstage with Itachi and Orochimaru and Tsunade and Jiraiya and the Hyuuga corporation and whatever else -- and onstage there was nothing but Sasuke chillin' at Naruto's. It's boring as fuck to have a story where everything happens to everyone but the main character. XD;

Besides -- ten chapters in and he's barely starting to wonder about Naruto maybe being sort of a little weird. NO, REALLY, DO YOU THINK SO. *prods sasuke with a stick* What happened so far is alright, but it should have been condensed into maybe four chapter, not eight. (since the last two are itaneji)

... blargh. *lazyyyy*

(also I don't care what most people would see. As long as I can see it, it bothers me. XD; )

Awww... Pretty bot just doesn't like to do whatever you want him to. Could he be not wondering what else is going on because he can't see there's somthing funny going on with Naruto?

Prettybot's got a bad case of tunnel vision. u___u;;;

He can't see what else is going on mostly because it's out of reach, though. he hasn't met Orochimaru yet and Itachi is covering his tracks pretty well. But I think I found some plot, so things should get better soon. I just have to find a way to bullshit Itachi's motives to give the result I want... Hrrrmmm.

So why would Itachi want to kill Orochimaru? Can't be a Sasuke-related reason because when it starts Oro doesn't even know Sasuke exists. *ponderponderponderponder*

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So why would Itachi want to kill Orochimaru? Can't be a Sasuke-related reason because when it starts Oro doesn't even know Sasuke exists.

I suppose that depends on why Itachi wiped out the other Uchiha. If he did it because of some flaw he perceived in them then it might be possible that Orochimaru was behind that flaw. Since I have no idea what sort of background you have for Orochimaru other than apparently working at Hyuuga Corp at some point I can't really help much.

Though it's obvious that Hyuuga Corp has some biomedical stuff going on, maybe they developed the Uchiha? Possibly Orochimaru was working on a way to become "immortal" by downloading a person's lifetime experience and knowledge into a blank Uchiha and Itachi discovered that fact?

Maybe Itachi is a failed attempt at that download process and that's why he went nuts. If someone decided they liked the way Itachi developed they might have copied his specs for Sasuke which would give Itachi a reason not to destroy him and a way for Orochimaru not to know about him (and to become interested in him later if you want to go that way).

Humm... Is Orochimaru the mad-scientist type? Given how much canon Orochimaru is obsess about their bloodline limit, maybe it have something to do with that?

...well, you've got me for one more night before I go home. I'd be happy to do more listening/plot helpingness while I pack. XD;

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you've already helped me out a lot. ^^ going to sleep now, i hope i can catch you before you go. ♥

You should--I don't leave until tomorrow afternoon. Tonight's just my last night here.

And when you wake, Spaz and I have posted the first log in

fatedthreads. We've set it up so people can comment on logs. Hope you like it.

*de-lurks*

I don't usually comment much, but I love CW so much (I've read and re-read it at least 3 times start to finish), that I figured I should tell you. Might help give you the motivation and desire to fiddle with it. Or not. Either way I thought I should let you know.

One of my favourite aspects of the fic is how there's just a slightly different feel to the Naruto and Sasuke bits then there is the the Neji bits. Neji feels just a little bit more desperate and trapped.

I also can't wait to find out Naruto's back story, you've dropped quite a few very interesting hints that point to Naruto having his alterations done at a very young age, and I really want to know the details.

#^___^#

Neji does indeed feel a lot more trapped. That might be because things are actually HAPPENING to him. Not like Sasuke. XDDD;;; Ahhh, that plot. *kicks it*

As for Naruto, HUHUHUHUHU.

I shall say nothing more. >.>

I'm writing an outline now, so hopefully I can start rewriting/rearranging the fic soonish. The beginning shouldn't need too much tweaking... Hrrm.

dont be laaaaaazy :(

if u r lazy, there is no more fic, and i will be all sad like :(

:)

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