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askerian ([personal profile] askerian) wrote2006-12-07 10:56 pm

teamwork 2 chpt.6, tidbit n° 1564814577 or something.

next tidbit, a little short but i'm stuck again. You know the drill, if you find a mistake, typos awkward phrasing doubtful characerisation blahblah, plz point 'em out?



"I'm a bit out of date as a virgin sacrifice, you know."

"It's alright," Naruto retorted as he stretched his legs and leaned back on his hands casually. "We can sacrifice Sasuke. He's not a virgin either, but the way he acts, I'm sure no one will be able to tell the difference."

Sasuke scowled at him over the edge of the ink bowl where he was mixing in more of his blood. "Oh, go to hell. You talk like you're a slut, but you don't have any more experience than I do."

Naruto snorted. "Sure I do."

"Porn rags don't count as experience. If that were the case, every prepubescent brat raiding his parents' closet for a laugh would be a sex guru."

Naruto guessed that in that light, memories of Kyuubi's sex life didn't count either, even if they really felt like they did. He grinned anyway. "I got a blowjob once. Top that, bitch."

Sasuke just stared at him, the brush he was using to mix the ink coming to a stop. Naruto's fangy grin widened.

"You can't, eh? Ha! I win."

Sasuke started mixing his stuff again. "I'm trying to figure out who would get anywhere close to your dick of their own will, but it's not computing."

Naruto sneaked a glance at Sakura. She was sitting in her spot and biting her lip, and didn't seem inclined to say anything. Damn. Naruto had hoped she would interrupt them. He grumbled under his breath, "It was a prostitute, during a trip with Jiraiya."

Sasuke smirked thinly, like he didn't need to add anything to that.

Naruto growled. "Shut up, I still win."

"Um, guys, can we--"

"Like hell you win, you had to pay someone--"

"Hey! I didn't ask her, she was the one who started it!"

"Because she could tell you were an easy mark--"

"Neither of you wins."

Silence fell in the dojo.

For a little while, at least. "... Uh. What?"

Sakura's cheeks were red, but she didn't back down; if anything, she glared even harder. "Neither of you wins, because I do. There, are you happy? I know I am. I always wanted to win a game of 'who has the biggest penis'." She didn't need to tack on an 'idiots' at the end; her tone came through clear enough.

Kyuubi purred out an appreciative laugh. Naruto's lips quirked up of their own accord, rueful and strangely pleased.

Sasuke wasn't so amused. "Wait a minute here. You had sex before -- and you never said anything?"

Sakura sighed wearily. "Listen, it isn't that I'm not happy you're jealous--"

Sasuke twitched. "I'm not--"

"--But this really isn't anything we have time to debate now. All you need to know is that it wasn't anyone from Konoha, and he really, really doesn't matter anymore, didn't even matter as much as I thought back then, and hasn't mattered at all for years. Now can we please get a move on -- preferably before the sun rises?"

Naruto chuckled. "Yes, ma'am." He sobered up a little; Sasuke still didn't look very happy, and if Naruto didn't say something, he would. And it really wasn't the right time for an argument. "But afterwards, alright? We'll have all the time in the world."

He paused, gave the dojo a look.

"Well, if we manage to get done before sunrise."

"Fine."

Sakura gave Sasuke an unconvinced look, but decided not to challenge his assertion.

[identity profile] book-people.livejournal.com 2006-12-07 10:23 pm (UTC)(link)
*grins* I love jealous!Sasuke and reasonable!Naruto. XD

A few things:
Sasuke scowled at him over the edge of the ink bowl where he mixed more of his blood
You want "where he was mixing [in] more of his blood."

if any, she glared even harder should be "If anything"

And I just liked this line: "Neither of you wins, because I do. There, are you happy? I know I am. I always wanted to win a game of 'who has the biggest penis'." You tell 'em, Sakura! XDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD

Adi

[identity profile] nev-longbottom.livejournal.com 2006-12-08 10:42 am (UTC)(link)
God, I find that icon terrifying.

[identity profile] ktoth04.livejournal.com 2006-12-07 10:35 pm (UTC)(link)
haha, i will never win a game of who has the bigger penis, but, my friends and i once tried to come up with who knew of the most sexual kinks, and i won hands down... lol

ff ftw :)
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[identity profile] stripedpetunia.livejournal.com 2006-12-07 10:35 pm (UTC)(link)
AAAAHAHAHAHAHA yessssss.

[identity profile] bootoye.livejournal.com 2006-12-07 11:59 pm (UTC)(link)
Yeah Sakura you tell them!!^^

She did win!

But SAsuke kinda has a point does it really count if you had to pay for it?

Poor Sasuke... he WAS the virgin of their encounter^^
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[identity profile] na-no-nai.livejournal.com 2006-12-08 12:41 am (UTC)(link)
Hahahaha! Go Sakura! XDD *pets Sasuke and his poor, abused ego*

(Anonymous) 2007-01-29 08:00 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh gods yes, please make a short of that! Sasu-chan
Sasuke (in the distance): What did you call me?
A.S.: Sasu-CHAN won't know what hit him! Must do, must do must do! (evil pervert grin) onegai?
A.S.

[identity profile] ithilgwath.livejournal.com 2006-12-08 12:52 am (UTC)(link)
hahahah YAY Sakura has the biggest penis~!

And Kyuubi likes that! *cracks up*

and jealous sasuke is always a bonus! ^_^

(Anonymous) 2006-12-08 01:21 am (UTC)(link)
Seven lines down, did you mean 'Porn mags' instead of 'Porn rags'?

[identity profile] ellenel13.livejournal.com 2006-12-08 01:38 am (UTC)(link)
I thought it was Sasuke being all scornful about porn. You know, like calling something a "rag magazine?"

[identity profile] trishalynn.livejournal.com 2006-12-10 03:34 pm (UTC)(link)
In the online Merriam-Webster (http://www.m-w.com/dictionary/rag) dictionary, it defines "rag" as a sleazy newspaper. I think you can stretch it to include magazines.

(Anonymous) 2006-12-08 01:44 am (UTC)(link)
Not to my brain, but my brain is a simple thing, so XD.

Also, as I forgot to point this out last time, great work~. Tis awesomeness.
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[identity profile] stripedpetunia.livejournal.com 2006-12-08 04:18 am (UTC)(link)
Yeah, you can use rag in the sense you intended there. I think it's probably getting kinda antiquated among those dang kids, but it's a perfectly acceptable usage. ;)

[identity profile] wakikaki.livejournal.com 2006-12-08 06:30 am (UTC)(link)
Yup, I've definitely heard it in this context. We probably stole it from torchon.

And yay for Dominant!Sakura!

[identity profile] delishka.livejournal.com 2006-12-08 05:59 am (UTC)(link)
As for Sakura being the most experienced out of them, it makes sense that Naruto wasn't really upset or suprised...after all, isn't Kyuubi's name for here 'Slut', while Sasuke is 'Bitch'?

Poor Naruto though....seduced by a hooker...was it a freebie, or did she make him pay? Or worse, did Jiraya buy it for him? Seems like something the pervert might do, to help the kid 'loosen up'.

(Anonymous) 2006-12-08 06:39 pm (UTC)(link)
See if you can find the one-shot on the ff.net account. THat'll tell you what happened.

[identity profile] oruo.livejournal.com 2006-12-09 10:19 am (UTC)(link)
"Neither of you wins, because I do." Im not sure, but shouldn't Sakura say: "Neither of you win, becuase I do." So. Win instead of Wins. I think.

[identity profile] monique-27.livejournal.com 2006-12-09 10:48 am (UTC)(link)
YAY! *squees* I love Asuka! Especially when you update! But, still, all the time! *is happy*

It's nearing 6 am, so no time to give a proper review [damn "messed up because of Finals" sleeping schedule] but I _have_ to say how awesome this update is.

"I'm a bit out of date as a virgin sacrifice, you know." <- I fell in love with this line in the last update. Hasn't lost its appeal yet. *^___^*

"Neither of you wins, because I do. There, are you happy? I know I am. I always wanted to win a game of 'who has the biggest penis'." <- *iz f'ing DED* OMG! I'm still laughing...and so, so _pleased_. Because I know that feeling. She's trying to get them to shut up, and she'd really rather not bring in the fact that she wins, but she really needs to because (1) they are idiots (2) there's more important shit to be done and it'll shut them up (3) she _owns_. *^.^* Go Sakura! ... And Go Asuka!

And, you know, you're right: Jealous Sasuke shouldn't be so cute. >D But he is. And he can't help himself. Really. *petpetsoothepet*

Also, "rag" is well-placed and suitable. It's a fine translation, and the expression is still used; it's just that we Americans like to butcher language, so there probably aren't a lot of people my age and younger that use it _often_ nowadays. I just happen to be a language/grammar/'sayings' geek. *^.^*

Vale!

~ Monique ~

[identity profile] schuldlos85.livejournal.com 2006-12-09 12:23 pm (UTC)(link)
*laugh* i really thought that naruto would be the one who's more affected that sakura has more experience as them... but sasuke?! *grin* - it's sooooo good to see him jealous!