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-I wrote some Teamwork yesterday! WOOHOO. So proud.
Now I just have the evilomg ending to figure out and then I can post the first draft and THEN I can sort out that mess I did with the scene structure. XD;
-I also wrote a short restore scene but it turned out to be unnecessary and give the wrong foreshadowing, so it's gonna go byebye. Still, now I have a better idea for the scene so it's not all wasted words. (T^T waugh cutting things ouuut)
-I think my problem with the characters all acting like thoughtless dickwads ist't REALLY a problem with the characters acting like toughtless dickwads -- it's with the authorial intent that makes it feel like a clumsy contrived ways to kick the plot forward. For example, Sai's guilt trip bugged me, not because I thought it was OOC of Sai to defend Naruto's feelings or to be a blunt motherfucker, but because for a moment it vaguely sounded like authorial intent saying "yeah, that shit is cool with me and it doesn't matter how he came across because I needed to break Sakura a little." The fact that Sai saw what he did as a dickish thing and sort of-kinda apoligized makes it okay, because it's a character acting IC and making IC mistakes and that's yay.
Comparatively speaking I didn't truly believe that Sai was speaking for Kishi very long. Maybe a half hour. XD
I still have a problem with Naruto and Kakashi's decision to keep Sakura out of the loop. I understand them not telling Kiba or Lee. I don't understand them not telling SAKURA.
And if one of them doesn't have a thought à la "damn, if only we had told her about what we learned then maybe this wouldn't have happened", if one of them doesn't own up to at least a tiny part of responsibility in Sakura's reaction, then it will be dickish. Unintentionally so, which is a lot worse.
I like characters being dicks and making dumb mistakes. I don't like characters being dicks and making dumb mistakes, and then the authorial intent telling me they're supposed to be perfectly nice, smart guys and not acknowledging the dickhead part was supposed to be negative. I don't even mean acknowledgement to be a "I'm sorry I did this" but even just a "yeah, i did mean it, so what, those are my reasons and I still stand by them". But a "lalala no i don't remember anything i have to question myself for oh look a butterfly" ... rrgh.
It's good for characters to have negative characteristics or accidentally cause trouble or just generally not be perfect. It's realistic. It introduces human conflict. But that the author doesn't even realize how it comes across is just storytelling fail to me and that offends me on a writerly level.
Shut up, writerly is so a word. I'm afanfic writer. I know these things. u.u
It's somewhat the same species as the difference bewteen a fic promoting how sexyhotwrongdysfunctional itasasu pre-nicetachi reveal would be, and a fic promoting pre-reveal itasasu with evil!itachi and broken!sasuke Stockholm Syndrome incest as something light and fluffy that everyone around them accepts and no one questions or stages an intervention for. It breaks my suspension of disbelief.
Also I really want to see an explanation for Sakura's reasoning with that fake confession and what she thought she was going to accomplish, whether she seriously thought Naruto would accept it or whether she was trying to make him hate her or what. Because raking up team seven angst points, bringing up that Naruto ships SasuSaku and shoving Sakura off to her own little side trip are very nice results, but the point is -- WHAT WAS SHE THINKING THIS WOULD ACCOMPLISH. Right now it just comes off as really clumsy. And for such a smart girl and one who only a few chapters ago was so determined to do the right thing from now on, I just... I've seen a lot of theories, some of which made a lot of sense, I even came up with a few, but fan theories and interpretations aren't going to cut it. I want to see the manga adress it, or else it will be writerly fail again.
Then again it's a good thing I'm not into Naruto for the perfect writing. XD
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suzukiblu/sunfreak/Rin is an awesome writer. And she draws cute things. She is also my friend, incidentally. She is also unemployed at the moment.
She's offering art commissions so she doesn't spend Christmas out in the snow or have to sell her computer and other personal effects or something bad like that.
If I could use money over teh internets I would. I can't.
So, she's offering commissions, starting at $5 and going up to $25. Seriously it's cheap. If you want artsies from her go here! And if for some strange reason you want to get me a present this year, I'd totally love a Sunfreak pic. Two birds with one stone! So... just saying. Plz halp Rin not to sleep in the snow. She has kitties to feed and I don't think they'd get plump on the remains of her laptop. ;^;
Now I just have the evilomg ending to figure out and then I can post the first draft and THEN I can sort out that mess I did with the scene structure. XD;
-I also wrote a short restore scene but it turned out to be unnecessary and give the wrong foreshadowing, so it's gonna go byebye. Still, now I have a better idea for the scene so it's not all wasted words. (T^T waugh cutting things ouuut)
-I think my problem with the characters all acting like thoughtless dickwads ist't REALLY a problem with the characters acting like toughtless dickwads -- it's with the authorial intent that makes it feel like a clumsy contrived ways to kick the plot forward. For example, Sai's guilt trip bugged me, not because I thought it was OOC of Sai to defend Naruto's feelings or to be a blunt motherfucker, but because for a moment it vaguely sounded like authorial intent saying "yeah, that shit is cool with me and it doesn't matter how he came across because I needed to break Sakura a little." The fact that Sai saw what he did as a dickish thing and sort of-kinda apoligized makes it okay, because it's a character acting IC and making IC mistakes and that's yay.
Comparatively speaking I didn't truly believe that Sai was speaking for Kishi very long. Maybe a half hour. XD
I still have a problem with Naruto and Kakashi's decision to keep Sakura out of the loop. I understand them not telling Kiba or Lee. I don't understand them not telling SAKURA.
And if one of them doesn't have a thought à la "damn, if only we had told her about what we learned then maybe this wouldn't have happened", if one of them doesn't own up to at least a tiny part of responsibility in Sakura's reaction, then it will be dickish. Unintentionally so, which is a lot worse.
I like characters being dicks and making dumb mistakes. I don't like characters being dicks and making dumb mistakes, and then the authorial intent telling me they're supposed to be perfectly nice, smart guys and not acknowledging the dickhead part was supposed to be negative. I don't even mean acknowledgement to be a "I'm sorry I did this" but even just a "yeah, i did mean it, so what, those are my reasons and I still stand by them". But a "lalala no i don't remember anything i have to question myself for oh look a butterfly" ... rrgh.
It's good for characters to have negative characteristics or accidentally cause trouble or just generally not be perfect. It's realistic. It introduces human conflict. But that the author doesn't even realize how it comes across is just storytelling fail to me and that offends me on a writerly level.
Shut up, writerly is so a word. I'm a
It's somewhat the same species as the difference bewteen a fic promoting how sexyhotwrongdysfunctional itasasu pre-nicetachi reveal would be, and a fic promoting pre-reveal itasasu with evil!itachi and broken!sasuke Stockholm Syndrome incest as something light and fluffy that everyone around them accepts and no one questions or stages an intervention for. It breaks my suspension of disbelief.
Also I really want to see an explanation for Sakura's reasoning with that fake confession and what she thought she was going to accomplish, whether she seriously thought Naruto would accept it or whether she was trying to make him hate her or what. Because raking up team seven angst points, bringing up that Naruto ships SasuSaku and shoving Sakura off to her own little side trip are very nice results, but the point is -- WHAT WAS SHE THINKING THIS WOULD ACCOMPLISH. Right now it just comes off as really clumsy. And for such a smart girl and one who only a few chapters ago was so determined to do the right thing from now on, I just... I've seen a lot of theories, some of which made a lot of sense, I even came up with a few, but fan theories and interpretations aren't going to cut it. I want to see the manga adress it, or else it will be writerly fail again.
Then again it's a good thing I'm not into Naruto for the perfect writing. XD
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suzukiblu/sunfreak/Rin is an awesome writer. And she draws cute things. She is also my friend, incidentally. She is also unemployed at the moment. She's offering art commissions so she doesn't spend Christmas out in the snow or have to sell her computer and other personal effects or something bad like that.
If I could use money over teh internets I would. I can't.
So, she's offering commissions, starting at $5 and going up to $25. Seriously it's cheap. If you want artsies from her go here! And if for some strange reason you want to get me a present this year, I'd totally love a Sunfreak pic. Two birds with one stone! So... just saying. Plz halp Rin not to sleep in the snow. She has kitties to feed and I don't think they'd get plump on the remains of her laptop. ;^;