askerian | State of the Asuka

I'm still planning to write more Team Seven drabbles/ficlets at some point! Some of the promts are very prrt. And you guys are still welcome to give me more suggestions. (or comment on the three ficlet-things I already did post. Yes. You may do that, indeed. u____u.)

But well, I haven't written more yet because I've been writing Sasuke's Teamwork chapter. I suppose you guys totally hate me for this. u.u~

Frankly I'm not sure it's much better than the previously written thinger (which I ended up reusing a lot of anyway.) I decided to go EXPERIMENTAL and non-chronological and for a little bit the timeline keeps flipping between two different moments. I'm still trying to work out the kinks, because so far both Jo and Saro got confused at it, so...yeah. I suspect my in-prose timeline markers aren't obvious enough. Maybe some big - LINE BREAK - BEGIN FLASHBACK - would do the trick... XD

Maybe nothing short of a big BEGIN FLASHBACK would do the trick. DX

... Well, if my experimentation fails I guess I'll have to put everything back in chronological order, which will have the added benefit of saving my inbox from three dozen WE DUN GET IT from ffnet, but poo. Not as shiny for me.

I'm bad. For a couple of reasons! but the only one that's not too spoilery to share is this one. When I was writing this little bit of Sasuke POV I couldn't stop cackling.
Sakura was safe enough for now -- anyone who got within a half-mile of her wasn't going to survive Kyuubi long enough to cause her any trouble.
Pffffhahahaha YOU KEEP TELLING YOURSELF THAT.

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Oooh, I can't wait to read this!

♥

' "I suppose you guys totally hate me for this. u.u~"

We love you!

yay! *feels loved*

Dude... if you need another beta, have at me! I would love to be able to help in some way.

Ohh. Hmm. We would have to talk a little about stuff, because on one hand I think you'd do a good job, and i really need another pair of eyes for this bit. but in the other hand I might just be unable to take a step back and see what needs done on my own because I AM SO BRAINDEAD. DX DX DX

... hell, even if i could see it another pair of eyes might be good regardless. But i'm too sleepy to email now and i think i'll try to finish that scene first so it's all in one block. and then we'll see? but thank you very much for the offer. ♥

*faceplants* zzzzz.

Can't wait to rad Sasuke's PoV! Looks to be an interesting read, as usual. ^-^

I love your icon...
Permission to use it as personal tag line?
:O)

Sure, but neither the icon, character or sentence is mine. Found them on photobucket, I think.

I know in at least one time-jumpy book I've read, the various scenes were in different font embellishments XD;;


regular=present time
italics=flashback

Yeah, I thought of that, but the problem is that reading more than one or two paragraphs at a time of nothing but italics gets hard to read for a lot of people (me included). One of the scenes I'd have to italicize is like a page long. So, I don't know. ._. Maybe it would look better/easier to read in the font LJ uses than in the font I type with in Word, though... hmm.

"Maybe nothing short of a big BEGIN FLASHBACK would do the trick. DX"

better idea: How about... uhm... a short line to establish a change of time AND place: something like:

Venice, 1706...

Sacred Mountain training ground, 3 months ago...

A village lost in memory, 10 years earlier...

Or even just: 10 years ago....

I don't think i'ts quite as smooth as .. well.. what it sounds like you're trying to do... but maybe people would 'get' that hint...

or failing that... do something funky at the start of the chapter like:

///// = start flashback
\\\\\ = end flashback

So that all you have to do is /// or \\\ and people will 'get it'... or something ^^;

There are already short centered lines to mark things, but since the timelines are off by maybe twenty minutes, around the same area, and no one knows what time it is, the time and location stamps would only confuse people a lot. Your suggestion would work if they were in different places entirely, or like a day later or something, but they're just too close. T__T

oooh...

well, then people are just dum XD

I don't read the story and din't know context and stuff.. sorry XD

One day I'll read/watch naruto and go OMG MUST READ ASUKA FIC but not yet XD

But yeah. people just need to learn to infer, as I'm sure you're doing a fine job indicating time and POV transitions. it IS your job to make sure it's clear, it's NOT your job to make it idiot proof. :D

you're wriiiiting <3 you're tryyying <3 aweseome!

As for the flashbacks I think we can handle time-skips alternating each other just fine without any direct sign apart from a blank space between paragraphs. As long as there are two time-lines at most. Because if you have more you may need a hint/prompt at every beginning that will specifically tell when and where we are.XD

#._______.# ♥

Nah, only two timelines but they go back and forth a couple of times each... ^^; I need to work on in-prose markers. I'm just not sure how. *flopded*

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