askerian | :DDDDDDD ahahaha. hah.

Guess who has writer's block again! Three tries and the first two don't count.

... which uhhh I HAVE NO CLUE WHAT THEY DO.

What I know is: Sasuke is still kinda "ohshit i could have lost them and if i wasn't too proud to cling I'D BE CLINGING". Sakura is in RAWR!mode, also she has claws. This must be used. Naruto is half yaysex! and half "heh, sasuke noticed sakura sexually i guess they don't really need me much anymore." (THIS NEEDS TO BE FIXED. but at first he might try to be stupidly selfless. though he's a little kyuubiish himself... hrrn hard to balance.)

There can be no SasuNaru anal since their first time happens later, but I don't want NaruSasu bumsex either because poor Sasuke's been bottoming to him way too much. (or maybe on their third or fourth round or something, quick mention-like. XD) I just don't like writing something I've already written before if there's no new angle to try.

There was a line about Sakura laughing at the boys because they got all prrrr over naruto going down on sasuke's finger. obviously the real thing must happen. also voyeur sakura = hot but it shouldn't become naruto does sasuke only for sakura's pleasure either. Also i was kinda thinking about sakura trying oral but not be 100% good or self confident with it, because her first one on one with naruto has him teaching her how to do it better, but she's in rawr!mode so i don't want to have her lose confidence in the middle of sex, that's not sexy. So maybe she just watches naruto and/or do it... ...or maybe even tell them to. *.* HMMMMM.

Also it's their first three-way since the time naruto molested them, so there's self consciousness. Also I think I want them to realize (or at least some lead up to) the fact that Sasuke likes a slightly higher level of pain than Naruto does. Naruto is okay with a little scratch here and there when he's not fight-fucking, but. It's mostly so I can have him going OW and Sakura going BUT SASUKE LIKES IT JUST FINE? D: and then HOW AM I SUPPOSED TO REMEMBER. XD I dunno why, the sasuke in my mind is a bit of a masochist. XD

Anyway it's not so much the acts I don't know how to handle (intercrural FTW) than the lead-up and the emotional payoff of each and the way they lead into each other and what i want it to bring them.

... babbling like this helped me get a vaguely better idea, but I'm still ~~taking~~ ~~open to~~ accepting suggestions.

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Obviously, I have no idea where that scene is going or what you have in mind, etc. This is just a few things that popped out to me as I read this.

I think even though Sasuke may be too proud to be clingy, that once things finally do get moving, some of that desperation could come out just a little. Maybe have him get kissy so it's not as... well, obvious, in his mind anyway.

LOVE the idea of Sakura telling them to. >D

I also like the idea of a situation where they're all sort of traveling hands and mouths and somewhat taking turns when it comes to the actual sex, since 1. they're still a little awkward around each other and not yet well-versed in all the more complicated ways they could go about it (and ya know, i'm a sucker for awkward sex. XD ) and 2. That would also give Naruto a moment to hang back a little, let Sakura and Sasuke have a little time before either she or kyuubi gets fed up with him on the sideline. (sheesh, I get what you're saying about balancing it all out. D: )

But then this is all physical stuff, too. I phail. With emotional stuff, I tend to just go with needy and confused, because well, I'm predictable like that. xD

*sends smutty thoughts your way*

♥ *^-^*

I have no clue how it ends. XD They fall asleep in a pile? It shouldn't resolve all their issues but they should still feel better at the end about the trio thing. And -- heh. yeah. I think they have to be awkward with "okay who gets in the middle of the sandwich" because they're still beginning. their first threesome thing there were a lot of Naruto Alternates Between Them ... and not too much sasusaku action that naruto didn't initiate actually. XD

I like the traveling hands and mouths idea. *_* they need to just... kinda... take some time to learn each other's bodies and stuff. And yeah, Sasuke getting a little desperate is also easy. It's just, Sakura. I feel like I'm going back and forth with her characterization. I think TW3 will need a rewrite or something so I can fix it (or at least make it like I MEANT to play yoyo with her spine). Blah.

Well, at least you have a little play in her characterization with the kyuubi thing, so... I wouldn't worry about too much. Maybe have someone take note of the difference (oh hey, hope she stays like this >D or something.)

... XD; I have a lot of variation about her reaction to the kyuubi thing actually. stupid me, writing the sequel before i'm done with the previous fic. *loses*

i wish she could have stayed like this. SOON MY PRECIOUS, SOON YOU SHALL BE RAWRSAKURA NONSTOP.

If I manage to get through that stupid Kyuunaru fighting scene aaaaaaaaaaah.

??? ew, smut D:

The cut made mention of "lemon" and "been trying to write", what did you think this post was going to be about?

I'm sorry, I didn't mean for that to be as rude as it sounded :( I blame my lack of sleep

it's okay, i'm supertired too so i was snappish. my bad. ♥

going to bed now omg so sleepy x__x *flops on*

And the first thing that pops into my head is a Sakura sandwich DP with Sasuke in front and Naruto behind, Sasuke taking hole #1 since he's the one engaged to her and all while Naruto gets hole #2. I know you've done this sorta situation before, but it could also work here. (I perfectly understand you wanting to do a different angle, though. Can't tell you how many fics I've started and left unfinished because it feels like I've written it before.)

Another situation... Sakura and one of the boys in 69 while the other boy takes her? Probably Sasuke doing the taking, since if Naruto's in 69 with Sakura, he can play with both of them.

That's all I got right now. Hope it helps.

That sounds great. And I've never read a scene like that before >.>

um...

I APPROVE 8D

*useless*

Honestly, I think you Major problem with be more Kyuu!Naruto and Kyuu!Sakura sexfighting and breifly forgetting about Sasuke. Kyu Wants her (And him) bad. And if Naruto tries to hang back, I think Kyuu is going to blow his top, because seriously, man, he's got a 16 (18?) year old case of blue balls he is trying to work off. He seems very RAW! Sex anyways.

But I liiiiikkkkkkeeee Sasue Bottoming......It's so HOT and he does it so well. Besides, Sasuke like being Sub. I think he likes the loss of control, though I doubt he will ever say so. Honestly, at least you didn't write it, he and Sasuke have never just been together. And you know Sakura would drool and both boys would be enjoying watching her enjoy, because Sakura is a total Yaoi fangirl. -.- Maybe make it softer by Naruto going down on them both first? *Curious* I'm not sure if I was any help at all, I'm kinda in that presleep drift place. I would be happy to see anything Porny from you invovling Team 7. Whatever ends up being spun will be fantastic.

Wellllll you know what I want but -ahemcough- >.>;;

Listen to some totally smutting music...? Thats all I do... well um.... So I am completely useless...

ugh...causing sasuke pain (goodkindofone)without topping him seems interesting. should use the claws. *drools*

ohh..and i don't know about you but i was thrown into narutoxsakura some time ago. yeah. look good together. or maybe it's just recent manga chapters talking. dunno. sasukexsakura seems impossible for me now.teamwork-verse makes it possible though...she wants him bad. more so than naruto, i think. that disturbes me just a tiny bit. naruto loves her. sasuke cares. hnn

there is something i wanted to share like forever: (kinda disturbing)

the first time i read teamwork i hadn't checked for their age. so i just supposed they had been 12ish. the fact that they had sex sinked in. creepywierd. then i actually checked how old were they and i found them to be 17 17 18 something. ugh. still i just can't take the image out of my head. every time i read teamwork i see sakura in her red outfit shortnaruto and blue t-shirt white shorts sasuke.

i see them moving around in teamwork-verse in those clothes in their 12 year old self. extra creepy. especially at the end of teamwork2. *shudder*

i'm really sorry for all this but it had to get that out soosleepy...

ugh. one more thing: sakura watching naruxsasu is really hot but i think sasuke watching naruxsak is hooot as hell as well. all kyuubi-like claws-fangs sex and sasuke "oh god i wanna be there but i can't right now fustration kinda thing"

i know you've written that already. dunno why it would feel different than the first time. wierd.

*goes to bed*

A bit late I know but I'll say my bit anyway...

I realy like the idea of sakura having a try at oral and not realy knowing how to go about it. I mean yeah cock + mouth = Oral, any idiot knows that but after that... ok I kinda thought I'd be able to figure out how to make this a bit more awesome; but how the hell am i supposed to know what feels good for a dick? I don't have one!

Now I'm sure Naruto knows a few tips and pointers (all the porn and dirty talk him and That frog pervert get into)"Ah! great idea, Sakura can practice on Sasuke and I'll lean all over him and give Sakura chan some pointers!" *perves* Probably the Kyuubiness doean't mind telling his two bitches what they should be licking.

Also, Sasuke + new Blowjob + (certainly NOT)clingyness= minght get a bit too grabby/hair pull-age. Naruto might be so obliged to save Sakuras hair and hold back Sasukes hands. then we get to have a sort of struggle/fight thing going on too (tho I imagine poor sasukes not really going to be able to concentrate too well this time around.) Sakura might also be tempted to claw a bit ("hey asshols! I'm still down here how's about you not try to break my nose with your freking boney hip!?")

Just an idea, hope it helps out!

:DDDDDDD ahahaha. hah.

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