Teamwork, chapter 6

[askerian]

yes, I KNOW, Saro, but Teamwork talked to me and um ;_; I'm going to bed now really. promise.

So i'm not too sure of the characterization at the very end, but i was running out of steam, so tomorrow i'll read it again and maybe edit. But for now it's an adequate enough end for this scene, I guess.

As always blatant OOC, grammar, lack of logic, plz point them out. I know some of the logic in this chapter is probably not all that logical seeing as i'm teh sleepy. plz gimme a hand ;__;



Naruto's quick check revealed them standing side by side in front of the far wall and pointing stuff at each other. The tone of their low voices indicated more seal talk, which made him groan; but Sakura-chan's left hand was cupping Sasuke's right elbow, and when he reached up to fix the curve of the preliminary sketch, he did it with his left hand instead of pulling away. Good boy.

Must be nice to be ambidextrous, Naruto reflected as he returned upstairs. Sasuke didn't use his left hand often outside of battle, but with a little prompting, Naruto was sure there were plenty of uses they could get out of him.

Entertaining himself with dirty thoughts, he went back to work on the next room. Really, this time! The second they were in the clear, he would molest them both. It had been way too long, and wasn't it ridiculous to jerk off so often to fantasies of them both when he would have just needed to reach out and touch? Yes. Yes it was. It was completely ridiculous and he was done suffering from blue balls night after night. And he wouldn't let them wriggle out of it again!

"Are you trying to clean this table out of existence?"

Naruto blinked down at the table, and then up at Sasuke, who was standing in the doorway with an eyebrow arched. Naruto glared at him; Sasuke blinked slowly, as if he didn't know that he was a cockteasing bastard-prude.

"So, how was the mini-date?"

Sasuke grimaced briefly. "It wasn't a date at all."

"What, no kisses?" Naruto demanded, aghast.

Sasuke looked away briefly, and then glared at Naruto. "If a kiss is enough for you to make anything into a date..."

Aha! They so had. "Nah, but it's a good start." Naruto grinned back, and let go of his cleaning rag so he could reach out and pat Sasuke's head in approval. "Good boy."

Sasuke dodged, of course, and slapped his hand away. "Don't start, I'm not in the mood. Come on."

He turned on his heels and stepped away. Naruto made a face, confused. "Going where? Doing what? I thought you didn't need me in the dojo just yet."

"No, outside. I'm going to put up the barrier."

"Oh, alright." Naruto wiped his hands on the rag and followed him down the stairs and out of the door. "What do you need me for?"

Sasuke shrugged. "Check the houses, look for intruders."

"... Why would there be intruders?"

Sasuke gave him a sidelong glance as he paused before the front door. "Apart from the two meddlers? Yesterday you weren't under watch, as far as I know. We don't know if you are today."

Naruto huffed at the reminder. "I wish they'd stop tailing me all over the place at random." Well, really, he wished they would just stop tailing him at all, but if he couldn't have that, it would be nice to KNOW when they were tailing him at least. But then that probably defeated the purpose.

"You're not going to get that for a while after tonight," Sasuke pointed out cynically, and opened the door.

"Yeah, but hiding a conspiracy's harder. When I sex you up, I'll only need to close the blinds for privacy."

Sasuke twitched and his head whipped around to glare at him. "What?"

Naruto grinned, hands joined behind his head as he started strolling down the street, keeping an eye out for intruders. "Well, I wouldn't want to shock little grandmas with eagle eyes who were innocently doing their laundry at the other end of Konoha, right? They could get a heart attack or something. It would be a real massacre! All over the village, grandmas falling dead from the shock."

Sasuke growled, a muscle in his jaw jumping. "Sex, sex and sex. Do you ever think about anything else?"

"Yep. Fighting. Betcha 'bout half of the grandmas would be found with smiles on their lips. That's the way I want to go, I think. Spying on good sex, if I can't kick the bucket by having good sex myself."

"Naruto..."

"Yeah, dying on the battlefield sounds good on paper, but really, death by sex is the way to go."

"Naruto. Don't make me kick you in the face."

Naruto laughed at his grouchy tone and faintly twitching eyebrow. "Spoilsport. You know, if I didn't know better I'd think you were shy. Hell, you'd give Hinata-chan a run for her money. At least, even if she wasn't direct about it, she still asked for what she wanted." He was going to end his tirade with 'and you want sex, repression-boy, but you'd die before asking for it', but Sasuke interrupted him.

"... She asked you out?"

Naruto made a face as the conversation was redirected. He hadn't meant for it to go down that way. "Kinda, yeah."

Sasuke's eyes narrowed. "Really."

Naruto turned away from the building he was surveying to give all his attention to Sasuke. He really hadn't expected that tone from him. "Not now! It was at least two years ago. She wasn't even with Kiba yet."

Sasuke gave a dismissive grunt; Naruto rolled his eyes. Of course Sasuke wouldn't care about Hinata-chan's love life, not even because he knew Naruto did. He only cared that she didn't ... er. Wait. Sasuke, possessive?

"You were such a hornball back then, it's strange you didn't jump on the occasion."

"Heh. Thought about it, but... no one likes being 'instead of', you know? Hinata-chan would have known I still liked Sakura-chan best." He grinned, suddenly, and nudged Sasuke's side with his elbow. "Besides, I just knew Sakura-chan would notice I'm supposed to be the man of her dreams, eventually."

Sasuke arched an eyebrow and regarded him coolly. "Did she?"

Ow. Bastard. He knew Sakura-chan still loved Sasuke best, there was no need to rub it in. "Well, sorta, yeah." A pause; a grin. "One of the men of her dreams, at least."

Sasuke looked away.

Naruto chuckled warmly, and nudged him again. "You know, I think I like it better this way." He didn't have to be 'instead of'; and he didn't have to lose Sasuke either. Infinitely better. "So, how was that kiss?"

Sasuke glared, again. "Exhibitionist, and now voyeur. Why am I not surprised."

"Hey! You make it sound like I'm perverted -- oh wait."

Sasuke rolled his eyes. "Stop clowning around."

Naruto stuck his tongue out at him, but did as suggested. They had a job to do.

They separated when they reached the wall; Naruto wandered through the compound, looking for intruders, as Sasuke stopped and touched things and frowned a lot. Naruto suspected him of not knowing exactly where the trigger tags were situated. Sasuke advanced slowly; Naruto searched in an S pattern so that he would come back to the outer wall regularly, and always ended up close enough that he could strike up another bout of conversation.

Mostly, it was perverted stuff, but Sasuke took to completely ignoring him, and since the only other living things Naruto had found so far were stray cats and rodents, it got a bit boring.

So when, on his next sweep, he noticed that Sasuke was now methodically smearing blood on an old tree, he just had to pause and stare. "What are you doing?"

"Activating," Sasuke replied absently as he shaped a hand seal. "Did you find anyone?"

"Just a mama cat and her kittens. I'm not chasing them off, she'd eat me."

"Hm."

Sasuke really didn't sound all that interested, in either the cats or the conversation. Naruto sighed heavily. Well, maybe if he wouldn't chat about random things, he would talk about the barrier. "So... Does this thing work with anyone's blood, or just an Uchiha's?"

"Just an Uchiha's," Sasuke replied distractedly. A kanji lit up on the bark, gleamed briefly and disappeared; Sasuke leaned back, regarding the spot in silence for a few seconds before he turned away, apparently satisfied.

Sasuke proceeded to the next segment of wall; Naruto went back to his patrol for another loop, dragging his feet a bit. If there really was someone else inside the compound, and they were good, Naruto wasn't about to find them that easily. If they were smart, they'd be following the two of them, or else staked out by the house or something. Still... perhaps he'd get lucky.

When he came across Sasuke again, Sasuke was smearing more blood onto yet another tree. Naruto tilted his head. "Er. Are they all stuck to trees? Why not the walls?"

Sasuke shrugged. "There are mirroring tags hidden on the walls, but the trees are the ones stocking chakra."

Naruto joined him and peered up at the tree. "Oh. Kinda cool that you don't have to power it yourself, but how the hell does that work? Trees aren't really alive -- or they can't produce chakra at least."

Sasuke rolled his eyes. "How do exploding tags explode? They're just paper and ink."

Naruto scratched his head. "... Wait, I knew this. I think."

Sasuke rolled his eyes, again; Naruto kicked at him, and was disgruntled when he dodged.

"As long as they work, why should I remember how they make them? It's not like I could make mine anyway, I'm a field ninja, not a... tag-supplier ninja or something."

Sasuke gave him a look that meant 'Why do I always get dragged into the stupidest conversations with you?' "They're infused with chakra, and then a simple spell is applied to them with special ink. It's the same chakra and ink for any type of tag -- fire, smoke, flash -- but the spell makes the effect different. The trees work on the same basic principle."

"... Duh. So then why don't everyone do this? Use trees?"

Sasuke hummed thoughtfully. "I suspect some do -- there must be a reason why Konoha has trees growing everywhere. But it's not as easy as that."

Naruto looked curiously at Sasuke and his sudden, suspicious lack of scowl. These days, it was rare when he didn't sound put-upon when he had to explain something to Naruto. The whole mess with Sakura didn't improve anyone's mood or patience, and Sasuke already didn't have a lot to spare, really. Naruto found himself loath to waste this sudden mood shift.

They strolled down the street in companionable silence; Naruto watched Sasuke as he cut his fingertip open with a kunai and did his thing with the next tree. He felt a little at a loss, though; it was just plain weird that Sasuke hadn't pointed out yet that Naruto wasn't doing his part of the job. "If there's anyone out here, I'm not gonna find them," he justified guiltily.

Sasuke nodded, and looked unsurprised. "Of course."

"...Of course?" Naruto made a face. "Hey, why did you ask me to come along if I was gonna be useless?"

Sasuke turned away and started walking again; for a few seconds he didn't answer, and Naruto frowned. What, no snipping back?

The silence didn't feel companionable so much as ominous, suddenly.

"I put you down as my next of kin."

Naruto stopped dead in his tracks. "... What?"

His back still on Naruto, Sasuke snorted and his voice turned insultingly slow and deliberate. "If I die, you get my stuff."

Snarling, Naruto jumped forward and grabbed Sasuke's shoulder, forcing him to turn around to face him. "What the FUCK?! I thought we had the whole seal thing under control -- you and Sakura said it wasn't very dangerous after all!"

Sasuke's face seemed carved into stone. "If we're cautious, and if nothing unexpected happens. It's just in case, Naruto."

Naruto grabbed Sasuke's collar with both hands and gave him a shake. "No, not 'just in case'! You're not dying ever, so shut the fuck up! What the hell, we'll just find something else--"

Sasuke snaked an arm under Naruto's and mirrored his hold, tugging him even closer so he could snarl in his face. "It is NOT that dangerous and I didn't tell you just so you could freak out at me! I don't plan on dying. I know we can make it work, and we're going to. Alright? Shut up."

Naruto tightened his grip, teeth bared. "So why are you telling me this now?"

"Because if I die and the child isn't mine, I want you to raze this compound to the ground. Don't allow anyone to take anything from it. Just raze it. And then sell it, or rebuild a little house for you and Sakura, or whatever. Hell, you can turn it into an amusement park if you want for all I care."

Naruto loosened his double hold on Sasuke's collar; he didn't let go, though, because this was probably as close to a bear hug as the bastard would ever let him get. "Damn it, Sasuke..."

The Uchiha looked away, leaned back. "I know some people came and stole furniture and random crap from people's houses before. It's disgusting, but it doesn't matter. I just don't want the compound to stand here like a fucking ghost town until the village decides that my corpse is cool enough for them to start looting it for clan secrets."

"Sasuke, you dumb fuck." Naruto reeled him right back in his personal space, leaned even closer, forehead to forehead. And then he smiled, even if the very thought hurt. "Sure. I'll make everything go up in flames. You goddamn pyro asshole."

He didn't let go for a few seconds; just looked into Sasuke's eyes and watched him stare back. He thought about saying something -- 'sure, you rat bastard, anything for you'. Perhaps 'I'll die before I let you check out on me.' Perhaps even 'you're so far under my skin you'll tear me up if you leave now. So don't. Just don't'. Maybe 'I love you', but then again, maybe not quite, he didn't know.

And then, reluctantly, he let go.

"With our luck the kid will be yours, just you wait and see. And I'm not teaching her Katon."

Sasuke's eyes narrowed; not seriously, though. "Really."

"Nah, Katon sucks," Naruto retorted as he crossed his hands behind his head and grinned. "I'll teach her Kage Bunshin and Rasengan -- that's way more than enough to get out of anything."

Sasuke rolled his eyes; he was smirking. "One trick-pony."

"Hey, pony yourself! I know way more than one trick."

"You're right. Two-tricks pony."

"You're just jealous, because you've got to remember tons of tiny things that don't even work half the time, but MY techniques are always enough to get out of everything!"

Sasuke's smirk widened slightly. "Except when they aren't."

"Oh, shut up!"

A moment of silence.

"...Pony."

Naruto tried to snap back something, prove Sasuke wrong and win the stupid argument, he really did; but he was laughing too hard for it to come through.

Comments

[ktoth04.livejournal.com]

would sasuke have to teach naruto katon? that would be a cute scene :)

anyway love this :D

[askerian]

yeah but it wouldn't work, Naruto's element is Wind, not Fire. XD (and it was like that even before caznon made it official too, ahaha, i'm magic. WAY TO BE OBVIOUS AND CLICHE, KISHIMOTO) That's the same reason my Sasuke couldn't learn Water Jutsu even though Sakura could.

thankee!^^

[artimusdin.livejournal.com]

okay, you just made me laugh out loud. It hurt, and yet I can't seem to be upset by that. *glee* Awesome. Just... awesome.

[askerian]

♥

[dogdemoninuyash.livejournal.com]

I really liked this one, I loved the Sasuke Naruto moment.

[askerian]

thankee ^__^

[na-no-nai.livejournal.com]

EEEEE!!!! I love this! The banter and Naruto griping about the 'cock-teasing bastard-prude'(that KILLED me, damn it!), but especially the bit where they're forehead to forehead and he's thinking all the things he might've said but didn't. *sighs happily*

[askerian]

fufufufu. thanks!

I wish I could write them more often, they're so fun, but Sakura. hnn. ;_;

[ina-noranaya.livejournal.com]

Damn. Yes. I love the NaruSasu interaction--they're just so them!
You're not dying ever, so shut the fuck up! They're so cute when they're yelling at each other! (And they love each other. Oh yes. But Sasuke wouldn't be caught dead admitting he actually has feelings like normal people.)

Tch. And Sasuke is a spoilsport. Does he have any idea how many molesting opportunities he's ruining? I think Naruto's POV is my favorite--just the way he thinks about the other two. (Nothing to do with him being an unrepentant pervert. Nope. Nothing at all.)

Grammar? What's that? ^__^

(Je dois étudier maintenait la Révolution Française pour un examen demain, mais je préfère lire le Travail d'Équipe. C'est très malheureux pour ma note que tu peux écrire des choses plus interessantes comme ça. Et je suis désolé pour mon français si horrible.
In English: Asuka-sama, I blame you. But in a loving way. ^_^)

[askerian]

Sasuke is a cocktease. u.u Secretly, he just LOVES Naruto's tortured whimpers as he's denied sex AGAIN.

(ahaha. I could help out a bit, if you want. Saro is learning french too, and i'm thinking of writing drabbles in french for her anyway. XD But I don't know her level of vocabulary -- you seem to be a lot more advanced than she is, anyway. Besides, it might make my french readers not kill me.

How did the test go?)

[edenfalling]

*happy sigh* Ah, Sasuke, as obsessive and socially incompetent as ever, even after he's started learning to loosen up a little. He just saves it for dramatic moments now. Silly boy.

I like the speculation about shields and trees -- it's an interesting idea.

"You were such a hornball back then, it's strange you didn't jump on the occasion." Opportunity, not occasion. Also, something about Sasuke saying 'hornball' sounds really weird to me, and what is this 'back then' of which he speaks? Naruto's still a hornball! :-D

[askerian]

Well, they're both socially incompetent anyway, so I guess they fit. XD

Guh, you're right, it's not a Sasuke word. Suggestions?

*edit edit* ♥

[bluefate.livejournal.com]

Ahh, that's so cute!
I love Naruto as an old horndog..."death by sex"...with his luck it'd be death by lack of sex.
And then Sasuke has to go and be a downer, that's hilarious!
..traps that require his blood, that's morose...so Uchiha...
eee..posseseive Sasuke!

so enjoyable to read...

[askerian]

fufufufu. Thankee~

[mitsuhachi.livejournal.com]

"Because if I die and the child isn't mine, I want you to raze this compound to the ground. " This line gave me chills. That was... wow.

The narusasu is so cute.... they're such BOYS about everything... it's really endearing.Like the way sasuke just comes out of the middle of nowhere with that next of kin comment. (though, out of curiousity, how did that work? Cause... normally you can't just put down whoever, though sasuke's situation is a little weird. Wouldn't he have had to...like... adopt naruto into the family or something for that to work?)

[(Anonymous)]

I wonder if them getting married would make Naruto and Sakura honorary Uchiha.

And if they'd make Naruto wear the little fan thing. 'Cuz I could so see Sasuke having to wrestle him out of his beloved orange-and-spiral motif.

-- Guile

[navisucks.livejournal.com]

/Squeee!

OMFG I love you and the interaction and the words unsaid and the Teamworkyness of it all! (ack you made me make up a word!)

It's bittersweet and passionate and I love it.

[askerian]

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[sarolynne.livejournal.com]

Don't think that you're not in trouble just because you wrote cute interaction.

Because you are.

But it is very cute, and I think IC. ♥

[askerian]

._. yes ma'am.

[(Anonymous)]

I also like how Naruto's the next of kin. He'd raze part of Konoha in a heartbeat if he thought it was what Sasuke would want. Sakura would be more likely to cling to it.

-- Guile

[askerian]

hehe. yes, you're totally right. Sakura would want to keep everything just the way it was and mope. Naruto is the one more likely to destroy everything so that it can't stay if Sasuke didn't.

[schuldlos85.livejournal.com]

sasuke jealous?! - about hinata?! - not a thing you often see ^^

the "if i die" part is alway hard to talk about - but it's necessary. especally because nobody knows how dangerous this seal-thing really is!

the whole i'm-caring-for-you-fight was great written!

[askerian]

*snerk* Well. It's not really a "what if she steals naruto from me??? D:" reaction, more like a "who does she think she is rarr mine" reaction. But yeah. XDDD

♥ thank you!

[elict.livejournal.com]

that is... really sweet. the closest thing to and IC-confession made by Sasuke that I've seen in a long time. and Naruto too.

"Hey! You make it sound like I'm perverted -- oh wait." = the win! I love that line so much! now I know where I got my personality from; I'm taking after your teamwork-naruto! o__O (and I'm happy about it too! I love the reactions i get when i blurt out things liek that XD)

[askerian]

Hehe. Yeah, he's not very likely to actually say anything clearly. Repression-boy FTW~

Fufufu. Naughty girl. >D

[icedark-elf.livejournal.com]

*happy sigh* Ah, Sasuke and Naruto interaction that is good, IC, and still enough to make me want to whimper. *purrs happily*

One day, I will win the lottery, and I will kidnap all my favorite writers and support them as my people-housecats so they could write without having to worry about having to feed themselves. And be like normal housecats and demand and get whatever they want. >.>

*more happy purring and goes to reread. again*

[askerian]

Thank you. ^_^

[des-butterfly.livejournal.com]

Oh Sasuke, you stupid fuck. Like Naruto ever going to let you die first. :P

^___^

loved this! <3

[askerian]

Muahahaha. Indeed.

Thankee!

[azartti.livejournal.com]

Aww, love it.

[askerian]

thanks. ^^

[(Anonymous)]

Why does it have to me that points out stuff instead of just squeeing like I want to. Oh look I made up a word too. I'll just do the stuff that hasn't already been mentioned of course.

The first line, Sasuke and Sakura are pointing things 'out to each other' (I assume about the intended seals) not pointing at each other.

3rd paragraph, change 'Really', to 'For real, this time'. 'fantasies of both of them', rather than 'fantasies of them both'. Change the last sentence to something like 'There was no way he would let them wriggle out of it again.' Just to avoid using an 'and' at the start of a sentence, but it's not too important for a fanfic.

Sasuke's first speech, 'this table' should be 'the table'. This table would mean Sasuke was right next to Naruto and even then it'd be a little weird.

There's a semi colon in the next bit that should be a full stop, someone missed the shift button. Damn French keyboards, who uses semi colons more than they use full stops anyway?

About the barriers, there's no way they can put up big ass chakra barriers and not have every ANBU member in Konoha know the instant they do it. Are they on a delayed timer or they going to do the seal immediately? Or is there a last key 'tree' (which then needs to be next to the dojo) which Sasuke will trigger at the last second? Hey if Naruto bled Sasuke out a bit then used that blood would it work? 'kay going back to grammar and logic.

The Hinata part, when Sasuke interrupts Naruto he does it with a silence at first? I'm not sure the dot thing works in this case, though it does convey Sasuke's pause and reluctance to ask. Majority vote maybe?

The bit were Sasuke reminds Naruto that Naruto is not 'the' man of Sakura's dreams,
'He knew Sakura-chan still loved Sasuke best, there was no need to rub it in.' Add a 'but just after the comma. Then a semi colon has slipped in again a sentence or two afterwards it should be a straight comma I think. Same thing five sentences after that.

They seperate at the wall and another semi colon, full stop this time.

Personal this time, 'Naruto suspected him of not knowing exactly where the trigger tags were situated.' Try 'Naruto had a sneaking suspicion that he didn't know exactly where the trigger tags were.' But the other works pretty well.

'Sasuke rolled his eyes, again;' Semi colon alert. Full stop needed. You were tired.

'"... Duh. So then why don't everyone do this? Use trees?"' 'Doesn't' not 'don't'

'He felt a little at a loss, though; it was just plain weird that Sasuke hadn't pointed out yet that Naruto wasn't doing his part of the job.' semi colon. A comma or a Full stop would work here.

Sasuke would put Naruto down as his 'inheriter' not his 'next of kin'. Next of kin need to be family, Sakura will count after the wedding, but Sasuke can still decide to leave his property to Naruto if he wants. Unless he transfers it into equal shares with Sakura, then he can only give what Sakura doesn't legally own. Otherwise it's a good choice because Naruto's the only one who could burn the compound down completely all by himself.

'Naruto loosened his double hold on Sasuke's collar;' semi colon, replace with a comma or a full stop.

'And I'm not teaching her Katon."' Oh oh OH! A slip?! Eeeeee! Bah probably tiredness. *kicks small pebble as show of annoyance.* Change to 'the baby' or 'the kid'. Sigh.

'Sasuke's eyes narrowed; not seriously, though.' semi colon, change to comma.

'"I'll teach her Kage Bunshin and Rasengan -- that's way more than enough to get out of anything." ' Again you give the baby a gender, did I miss a post? Somewhere?

'Sasuke rolled his eyes; he was smirking.' I'm the one trick pony watch me....semi colon! A comma please.

'Two-tricks pony."' 'Two trick pony.' I know it's strange it's not plural.

'Naruto tried to snap back something, prove Sasuke wrong and win the stupid argument, he really did;' One last time, semi colon! Comma please.

Okay, I'll go back to lurking until the next bit comes out then. Ciao.

[askerian]

ZOMG thank you so much. ♥ *edit edit edit*

Yay

[slamu.livejournal.com]

I enjoyed this bit alot. I'm not sure why it was this more than some other one. The tag explanation? Cool, makes sense, and is that info that Sasuke had to look up, or just a lesson that Naruto slept through?
NaruHina part kind came at me unexpected. *sniffle* I'd almost think you were throwing me a bone. Kinda sad, but touching.
The bit with Sasuke telling Naruto "just in case"? Sad, but I can kinda understand where he is going with it, and where he's coming from. However, if he's thinking like that, then it's time for Naruto to kick the crap out of him again, and use Jesus-like powers (TM) to set him straight! And, failing that, there is still the burning power of YOUTH! (sorry, it just begged for it.)
That being said, Naruto's right; dying in battle sound cool on paper, but dying in bed is the way to go. (or the couch, or the kitchen counter, or the back porch, or...)
"Sex, sex and sex. Do you ever think about anything else?"
"Yep. Fighting. Betcha 'bout half of the grandmas would be found with smiles on their lips."
Answer question, back to perving. <3
3 trick pony- Sexy no Jutsu. (/Harem no jutsu) Yeah, he might have these powerful moves now, but before he had those (and summoning) he used sexy no jutsu to take down a Kage. Sorta.
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Ibiki, despite the rumor mill, wasn't into the whips and chains and screaming in bed. He got more than enough of that at work.

Re: Yay

[askerian]

Probably a lesson Naruto slept through. XD

Well, the naruhina scene was mentioned in the ficlets before and all that. .__. And I figured Naruto wouldn't really bother hiding it, it's not like he's ashamed or anything.

*snerk* indeed, Sasuke needs another beating. Kind of overdue, really. I'm hoping naruto will sex it outta him instead. ♥

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ahahaha WHUT? XDDDDDDD

[ithilgwath.livejournal.com]

eee! That was wonderful! The interaction was great and sweet and I loved it. Choosing next of kin... an almost mundane activity that has so much meaning behind it. Wonderful.


hee hee... pony

[askerian]

thankee ^__^

[bootoye.livejournal.com]

I was happy to see Sasuke acting possessive over Naruto, he is finally admitting his feelings towards Naruto. That's great!

Naruto should die having sex in his old age... that just sounds so cool^^

I am glad that Naruto has been given 'the next of kin' status, it is good for both him and SAsuke.

Now all I have to ask is where is Sakura? Its nice for the boys to chat but I feel like Sakura is MIA!

Is the sealing scene next? I can't wait!
(um is it one of those pagan rituals which must be concluded with smex? ) ^_^ *hopeful*

[askerian]

Admitting, admitting, he's just a territorial bastard XD (but yes eee.)

I know! ;_; but the seal is supposed to be the next scene and i'm trying to think up a way that will help the narusaku and sasusaku a bit, but right now i'm still drawing a blank, stupid scene. *sad!*

(it doesn't have to, but you betcha it will. >D ... unless i chicken out again ;.; )

[nothri.livejournal.com]

I think the whole thing is awesome, but I really love the ending. Bit of a spoof on how the ninja techniques are used in the series, yes? I'm also liking the way you engineered the argument (just doesn't feel like Sasuke and Naruto if they aren't growling at each other at least part of the time....and I mean that in a totally non-sexual way. I swear...). Good scene!

[askerian]

Haha, yes. XD Naruto's magical Kage Bunshin and Rasengan -- i really need to imagine some enemies during the chuunin exam where he'll have to stretch his limits a bit and show some originality. It's good that he can do so much with only two techniques... but god, there are so many more! D:

Thank you! ^___^

[nothri.livejournal.com]

Well, its just plain bad strategy in his part. Yes, they are useful, versatile techniques, but he has used them so much that EVERYONE KNOWS about them. Any ninja worth his salt will have developed a counter to the attack if they know they will be dealing with Naruto (like, say...a group of shadowy ultra powerful badguys with plots of world domination that hunt people possessing tailed beasts and forcibly strip the monsters out of said people). So the techniques are only truly useful if Naruto takes his enemy by surprise and has never dealt with them before. Old enemies like Orochimaru and Kabuto are sure to have already created strategies to render those techniques useless.

Just my two cents. ::shy grin::

[askerian]

Buahahaha. yes, exactly! ♥

... except I am not a ninja and I have no idea how to counter them efficiently. And I have to create OCs and stuff and aurgh!! Maybe I'll make a post asking for people's help or something. XD The OCs really aren't all that important on the plotline as people, so I really need to figure out their techniques first.

[narsksas.livejournal.com]

*is ded of smex on the inside*

*cough* Ahem. SQUEE. Thank you for listening.

One thing I noticed and no one else pointed out MIRACLE:

His back still on Naruto, Sasuke snorted and his voice turned insultingly slow and deliberate.

It should read His back still to Naruto. On would indicate he was ON Naruto - not that I object to the mental images, but still. Not the right mood for the scene, and wotnot.

[(Anonymous)]

*has been well and properly shut up about everything she ever mentioned in the last comment* Squeee.... Pony.