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askerian ([personal profile] askerian) wrote2006-08-17 03:47 am

(naruto) Cyborgness~ Chapter 7

I AM A MAD WRITING MACHINE~ *preens* Here, have seven pages of cyborgsuke and furrynaru.

Same as always, not betaed -- also sasuke's train of thought is weird sometimes; it if really is unclear, please point it out.



Sasuke wishes Naruto would quit his caterwauling. He's supposed to be a fox, damn it, not a cat in heat. Naruto doesn't seem to care; he belts out romantic ballads and perverted ditties, and sometimes garbled mixes of the two. Sasuke is absolutely horrible at understanding poesy, and even he can tell that the furry is pulling his lyrics out of his ass half the time.

The matter isn't so much the modified lyrics, as the notice people are taking of the two of them. Naruto and Sasuke are young men, they look in good shape; those are the only thing saving their stumbling comedy routine from making them into the perfect mark. Their clothes, while not expensive, aren't threadbare and out of fashion, neither of them is carrying, and Naruto is drunk off his ass; and if Sasuke stopped supporting him, he'd land face first in the gutter.

It's a very tempting thought. But Sasuke reserves it for when they get mugged. It's going to happen, he knows it is; the only uncertainty left is when.

The streets are starting to look suspiciously empty, for this hour of the night. There's something going on. How annoyed he is at Naruto for being so noisy, and being unable to stand on his own. The furry is strangely heavy, and a little too affectionate. He babbles on and on about things Sasuke tries not to pay attention to, his nose in Sasuke's neck.

Sasuke has the sneaking suspicion that Shikamaru didn't take his "I'm just crashing at his place until the job's done" at face value.

"Yeah -- yeah, you mah BEST FRIEND EVER. No, really."

Sasuke resists the urge to roll his eyes; then gives into it, because as illogical as they are, developing mannerisms means he is settling into his personality. His personality is more than verging on sarcastic bastard. He is grimly content with the idea. "Earlier you said Chouji was your best friend."

"... I did?"

"When he gave you a potato chip."

"OH! Oh yeah. That! Tha's really im-portant. Really really important. I mean, Chouji... potato chips... Hez my bes' friend! Gave me a chip. Out of his OWN BAG. Serrously."

Sasuke rolls his eyes again, and adds a snort for emphasis. Naruto is too heavy. What the hell did he stuff in his pockets? And he keeps squirming and trying to slip out of Sasuke's hold. So annoying.

"But you... you're my BESTEST bess'friend. An' I got something for you. Surpi -- surri -- sur-pri-se. Guess whazzit?"

Sasuke contemplates ignoring him.

Then Naruto nudges him, several times. "Guess what? Guess whaaat?"

"... I don't know," he grumbles dutifully. "What is it?"

Naruto erupts in giggles. "Not telling! S'why it's called a sur-prise. Idiot."

Sasuke's heel just happens to land on Naruto's toes. His fault for being a bumbling, drunk idiot.

"Ow!"

"Stop whining."

"You hurt me--"

Sasuke presses a hand to Naruto's mouth, and sharpens his senses. He can hear yelling from the next street over, over the muffled, slobbery protests of the fox furry. A fight? A skirmish between gangs? That would explain where everyone has gone.

Naruto pulls his hand down, rearing back. Sasuke is about to grab him again to keep him up, but the blond isn't struggling or falling anymore. He stands, balance a little unsure, tail up as a counterweight, a dark scowl on his usually happy face. His ears are perking up. "... Broken glass."

Sasuke frowns, sharpens his hearing to borderline dangerous heights, and finally hears the tinkling of shards of glass being kicked off a window frame.

Then a gunshot.

They run.

Naruto runs like he's only narrowly missing the ground each time he falls forward. But he doesn't lose ground.

Sasuke braces himself and stops him just before the corner, a hand on his shoulder; Naruto slams into him, almost falls, straightens up on his own. His tail bristles, puffed up to twice its original size, and there's a sneer on his face that bares his fangs up to the gums.

They both know it's got to be the hospital.

"They have to have sentries. We can't rush in -- Naruto!" He has to shake the furry, hard; Naruto isn't paying attention to him. "We don't know how many there are, and they're armed."

"I'll fucking kill them all."

Sasuke knew that Naruto had some kind of bond with doctor Tsunade and Sakura, but he didn't think it was that deep -- or that Naruto even had a violent bone in his body. He didn't even get violent when Sasuke himself threatened his life.

Naruto is not serious in his threat, Naruto is just angry and doesn't need to be arrested -- fuck, fuck, fuck, Sasuke's losing control of his subroutines. The protocol in this case is to subdue violent individuals, call the precinct and wait for reinforcements -- he'll never find a payphone in time in these streets -- something explodes.

He welcomes the Sharingan mode.

Authorized Troup Support Uzumaki Naruto takes off running; UG-7-SA, codename Sasuke lets him go. They have bombs. Terrorist threat. Neutralize first, secure delinquents second. He kicks open a boarded up window, makes his way through the empty house to another window -- fire escape, he climbs. Rusty; breaking. He grabs the edge of the roof, pulls himself up -- gravel-covered roof, a ledge, jump. Landing. The blueprints of the area didn't show a wire fence there; he plows through. Jump, ladder, balcony ledge, screaming woman in apartment -- no threat visible, just him. Dismiss. Run out in the corridor. Dodge under the arm of the man opening the door in face, run -- mirrored balcony. Jump. Fall -- catch. Slip -- catch again, recalibrate left arm's performances. And climb the ladder, three stories above ground.

Hospital. A house on the roof -- Doctor Tsunade's penthouse. He breaks the window cleanly, finds the staircase, runs down. Third floor, three patients out in the corridor -- worried, but body languages show no sign of direct threat. This floor is free. Second floor -- trauma ward. Patients limping away; he throws open the door to the staircase. No authorized personnel -- no nurses. He has a mission, but --

"Evacuate through this door! Up to third floor, the East-side fire escape!"

Some don't seem to hear him. He catches a man's arm -- Watanabe Youssef, fifty-one year old, residing -- irrelevant, he's trustworthy. "Guide other patients out." It's not a request.

He runs again, leaving behind the vague echoes of subroutines protesting his commandeering a civilian; loses himself into the Sharingan mode again.

The ground floor is full of smoke; the blast screen black with ash. Naruto's gate is closed. The top half of the wall beside it, that used to separate the waiting room and the restricted area, is a pile of rubble. Two unidentified men in green scrubs are beating gang member off of it with broomsticks; Orderly Yakushi Kabuto is using a tazer on those trying to pull the brooms out of their hands.

Sasuke counts the enemies; two, five, seven, ten. Thirteen. Thirteen mobile, two on the floor. Guns -- six.

Five.

There is Naruto.

He slips around Yakushi, leaps on the wall, foot already scything through the air. Two shaved heads crack together. One down, one wobbling back up -- Sasuke is landing, crouching, elbow to the gut -- whirling, on hands now, double-kick to the chest -- three men down. More arrive. He dodges before they touch him.

Everything is red. Doctor Tsunade is in front of him, in the melee. He catches a knife-wielding hand -- breaks the wrist, breaks the leg, shoves away -- four down. Doctor Tsunade is holding her own. He scans the room -- no other bombs. The first one was Molotov, from the scent. Dodge! Tsunade swings a chair, winging another man -- not down. Sasuke downs him, knife-hand to the back of the neck, grabs Tsunade's chair which is swinging back at him again.

Brief pause. Recognition. He scans the room again -- seven down, blood on the floor. Can't locate Naruto. Locates legs -- feminine legs -- in the middle of the group Tsunade is charging.

Hospital slippers. Hostage.

He grabs a neck, a wrist, throws people behind him -- gunshots. He whirls around -- Yakushi. Handgun. Illegal -- later! One dead, one dying. Hostage first.

Nine down; there's Naruto. Ten -- Tsunade.

Pause. Threat to the life of the hostage. Nurse scrubs. Short black hair. Never met her. Knife held to her throat, held from behind, the two men left back to back.

Tsunade lifts up the chair. "Let go of Shizune or I'll kill you with my bare hands, oath be damned."

Behind them, gun cocked; he glances. Yakushi again, holding downed gang members in sight.

Swift blur -- a man jerks -- a crack. Eleven down. Three dead. Naruto's hands are red. Sasuke reaches, blocks a swing of razor to Naruto's back -- Tsunade's chair crashes into the man's head. Twelve down.

Blood at Shizune's neck. Blood from Naruto's claws in the man's wrist, severing the vein. Blood from Naruto's claws on the man's shoulder, wrenching him off Shizune, throwing him aside.

Blur -- Naruto pounces. Sasuke blocks -- claws graze his nose even as he dodges. He drops to the ground, twisting Naruto's arm -- Naruto rolls; kicks. Sasuke's arm malfunctions; he lets go. He stands between the downed gang member and Naruto.

Naruto is Authorized Troop Support; this is just a misunderstanding. He reminds him; "This is not justifiable homicide."

Naruto pauses. Sasuke watches. The probabilities of a hostile attempt are dropping.

"He's right, brat. This is not self-defense anymore. Now calm down and round up those assholes."

Naruto closes his eyes, and then straightens up slowly.

"... Fine, old hag. If you say so."

Sasuke surveys the room a last time. The two men in green scrubs are cautiously going around collecting weapons and deposing them out of easy reach, behind the blast screen; Yakushi is keeping watch on the few gang members who seem to want to get back up; Doctor Tsunade is leading Shizune back to a still-standing chair and sitting her down.

He hears sirens. He lets go of the Sharingan mode, and starts checking the injured.

Four dead; two gunshots, a broken neck, and one of the man he gave broken legs to fell badly and severed his femoral artery. Sasuke breaks his neck too; it's too late, there's nothing but the humane gesture left to do.

Nine assailants alive; he helps the younger man in green to drag the ones who won't suffer from being moved toward a wall. Naruto moves to the rest; Tsunade snaps at him to get her doctor bag instead. The fox furry stills, then goes, slowly climbing through the hole in the wall. The older man in green is giving first aid to one of the worst injuries; Tsunade joins him, and then, slowly, Shizune. Yakushi watches them; then he calls for Sasuke.

Sasuke looks down at the gun in his hands, then up at Kabuto's face. Tired, tense, worried. Glasses broken, blood on his cheek, no other obvious injuries. "Please, keep them in sight. Cover us. I have to..." He jerks his head toward the rest of the wounded.

Sasuke nods, hefts the gun, sights the obvious leader. The man glares, but slips back down the wall and onto the floor. Slowly, Kabuto joins the other medics to treat the wounded.

Three police cruisers screech to a stop in front of the hospital two minutes later.

+

"Oh, Sasuke -- here, have a cup of coffee."

Sakura is standing before him; Sasuke pauses, still holding onto the destroyed row of chairs that he was dragging outside.

"You should get some rest, you've been cleaning for hours..."

Sasuke shakes his head; he almost refuses the cup, but then she meets his eyes, and hers are reddened; so in the end he takes it. It's unnecessary, but she isn't supposed to know that. Perhaps it soothes her to care for others. "I can't leave it in the middle of the waiting room."

"Get some rest, Sasuke, please."

He's not tired. He doesn't get tired. But his energy levels are dangerously low. Perhaps he should. He shakes his head again. "Did you find everyone?"

"Yes, finally." She chuckles; she doesn't seem to be all that entertained. "We found Mister Henderson in Doctor Tsunade's dirty clothes hamper. And Miss Leight and Mrs. Arfaoui got back to their homes safely. They were the last ones missing."

He nods. A simple yes would have been enough.

"Anyway, doctor Tsunade says you can go home, and to come back at five PM this afternoon. So go get some rest, please. You haven't slept since yesterday, have you?"

"I -- no." Well, he's definitely slower. He frowns a little as he makes his decision. "Very well. I'll put this outside and then go. ...Where is Naruto?"

Sakura winces; and Sasuke realizes that he hasn't seen Naruto since the police arrived.

"He... He'll be waiting for you at the corner of 15th Street. Just get home, the both of you."

Sasuke stares at Sakura, as he realizes what's been going on. "Why didn't he make his deposition?"

Sakura blinks up at him, licks her lips, hesitating, then shrugs and looks away. "Sasuke..."

"He killed someone," Sasuke retorts, scowling.

"Kabuto killed two! And he was doing it in self-defense. And the police said alright and left him alone. Naruto was doing it in self-defense too."

Sasuke frowns. The gang members weren't threatening Kabuto directly. But maybe they were threatening someone else; he didn't see. The one Naruto killed had been holding a woman hostage -- a woman he also intended to sexually assault, from various clues Sasuke registered at the time, but hadn't put together.

"So then if he has nothing to fear, why isn't he talking to the police?" he asks again, stubbornly.

"Sasuke..." Sakura gives him a pleading look. "Naruto is a good person, but he can't afford to have a criminal record. You need to talk to him about it, alright? Please talk to him before judging. Please."

Sasuke downs the coffee just so he can crush and throw the empty cup at the trash bag in the corner. "Fine," he snaps. "Fine, I'll talk to him."

He turns away, dragging the row of twisted, crushed chairs outside, throws them on the pile of trash by the wall with all the rubble, and then stalks down the street. As Sakura promised, Naruto is waiting just past the corner; Sasuke doesn't talk to him, barely gives him a glance. Naruto falls into step with him, and they go back to the subway, all but ignoring each other.

It's only a few stops, then a five minutes walk, and then Sasuke is following the fox furry up the path to his house again.

Naruto's golden ears are drooping; the tip of his tail brushes the ground. He looks ready to drop; and Sasuke is starting to shut down unnecessary systems just so he can scrounge up enough energy not to shut down before he's in the workshop.

Naruto doesn't bother turning on the lights in the workshop; he zigzags through the piles of stuff, aiming for the door that connects with his little apartment. Sasuke sits on the metal table he's been using as a bed.

"Naruto."

"Hmm?"

"We will talk. Later."

Naruto pauses at his door, his back still turned on Sasuke; then he grins tiredly at him over his shoulder. "Alright. But lemme give you your present before you drag me off to the cops, okay?"

Sasuke scowls; he can't promise that. But he's reaching his limit. He lays down, eyes closed, listening to the sound of Naruto's feet dragging on the floor; Naruto struggling his way out of his clothes; and the mattress creaking under the furry's weight.

Sasuke doubts Naruto will run out while he's unaware, anyway. He sinks into sleep mode. Just before he goes out, he wonders what kind of crazy thing his present is going to be.

+++



In other news, [livejournal.com profile] rayemars has caved again and written yet another installment of the pimp Naruto story. >DDDDD

[identity profile] trypton88.livejournal.com 2006-08-17 02:50 am (UTC)(link)
-first comment dance-
asldkfja8ddanrvv euirv. because there are no words for the awesomeness. because Sharingan Mode is breathless and metallic. Because Naruto is deadly and drastic. and because... just BECAUSE. the GREATNESS eats me! -writhe-.
-bows to your awesomeness- thank you for updating this. It's been so long I nearly lost sight of it's greatness.
omgosh, ItaNeji more? +headdesk+ lerrrrve+

You. Rock.
+J+

[identity profile] chrismakkuh.livejournal.com 2006-08-17 03:12 am (UTC)(link)
The Pimp Naru thing is like seriously watching on Soap on tv!!

I can't stop... O_O


And I'm not to familiar with this story asuka... :( I'm sorry I can't comment...

Umm, where can I find the beginning?

[identity profile] chrismakkuh.livejournal.com 2006-08-17 12:48 pm (UTC)(link)
.......





*is blinded by the stupid*


My eyes...BURNING?!?!?11

[identity profile] questofdreams.livejournal.com 2006-08-17 03:16 am (UTC)(link)
I really loved how you wrote this, particularly the fight part, because it's all from Sasuke's point of view and it's all so...mechanical! The writing style fits the subject matter perfectly. It's like a list of orders or commands that's running through Sasuke's head. Awesome.

And I want to find out exactly why Naruto can't afford to have a criminal record and where Kabuto fits in and what Naruto's present is and GAH...YOU HAVE TOO MANY FICS THAT I AM FOLLOWING, WOMAN!! I'm torn on what I want to poke you for more about XD but you've been doing fine going with whatever flows so far so I'll leave you to that and spare you my poking, haha.

[identity profile] crazy-toffee.livejournal.com 2006-08-17 03:21 am (UTC)(link)
Naruto is becoming more and more mysterious while Sasuke's efficiency... drops? Well, no, I wouldn't say he's becoming less powerful, but he seems increasingly more worried over Naruto's whereabouts, during fights. I like the way Sasuke's thought-patterns follow what is coherently pre-established, yet, within those margins, he is seeing something else< /i> now. Or at least, it feels like that.

The fight-scene felt a bit stilted, action-wise. But over all, this was just as good as all the rest. ^_~

[identity profile] complexphoenix.livejournal.com 2006-08-17 08:48 pm (UTC)(link)
I thought you did a good job with the robotic-viewpointed action. The chapter was fun to read.
tephra: (fangirl squee)

[personal profile] tephra 2006-08-17 03:31 am (UTC)(link)
SQUEE!

I think the fight scene and Sharigan Mode work well; very fast and a bit choppy so you feel like you're in the middle of the brawl yourself.

I'll have to read it a few more times before I have anything more coherent to say than "OMG *squee!* more SasuBot!!!" :)

[identity profile] dacaktty.livejournal.com 2006-08-17 04:17 am (UTC)(link)
I'm going to go with everyone else and SQUEEEE!!! ..


...

enough of that. LOL I love this story so far, the only thing I found was ...sectioned his femoral artery

Sectioned should be severed, no? :P

[identity profile] dacaktty.livejournal.com 2006-08-17 06:53 pm (UTC)(link)
happens to all of us XD

[identity profile] rayemars.livejournal.com 2006-08-17 04:37 am (UTC)(link)
s;kljasg Kabuto with an illegal handgun yes.

Watching Sasuke fight his subroutines is fun, but watching him get around them is even better--I can just picture him standing calmly in the middle of the fight and telling Naruto the not justifiable homicide line while Naruto's all 'move your leg away from his neck and gimme a straight shot dammit!.'

Though unfortunately, I am now worried about what he's going to do about those programs when he wakes up again. ;_; Naruto!

[identity profile] darksideofstorm.livejournal.com 2006-08-17 10:37 am (UTC)(link)
Totally awesome. I love jow the style changes completely when Sasuke flips into Sharingan mode, and drunk!furry!Naruto is just damn cute. This line especially cracked me up:

"OH! Oh yeah. That! Tha's really im-portant. Really really important. I mean, Chouji... potato chips... Hez my bes' friend! Gave me a chip. Out of his OWN BAG. Serrously."

*dies*

Also, in this line:

Sasuke is absolutely horrible at understanding poesy, and even he can tell that the furry is pulling his lyrics out of his ass half the time.

Should that be poetry?
ext_9839: Yuko (woo)

[identity profile] lukita.livejournal.com 2006-08-17 11:31 am (UTC)(link)
Mmmm~ I guess drunk!Naruto is not so drunk after all. It looks like I'll be squeeing along with everyone else about the beauty of Sharingan mode Sasuke.

[identity profile] runespoor7.livejournal.com 2006-08-17 01:49 pm (UTC)(link)
I'll join the chorus of SQUEEEEEEEEEEEE right about now.

Hm. So Naruto knows perfectly well how to hide at least some things, so well that it takes actual action for Sasuke to realise that something is honestly, really wrong. More wrong than wondering how old Naruto was to get his implants. And yet not questioning how fast Naruto seems to have recovered from his drunkenness.

In other news, Kabuto killed two men when nobody was looking and the rescue was already well on its way. Mmh. Will have to know more about the reasons of the attack there, but I've got a shiny theory. *theory shines*

Random Weeee! at Gai&Lee mention.

Also, major major love for Naruto. "I'll fucking kill them all." Characters losing moral restraints for those they love: major button. *happiez* (Sasuke's thoughts about Naruto's perviness make me wish for a meeting between Jiraiya and Sasuke. Oh yes it does. And then we have Naruto's present, of course.)

Did the cyberpunk happen to counteract the Sakura-first-time 'fluff'?

[identity profile] runespoor7.livejournal.com 2006-08-17 06:57 pm (UTC)(link)
I think it's interesting since Sasuke realises when Naruto is outwardly lying - unless of course Naruto meant to mislead him by showing those signals, but that sounds a bit OOC to me. Besides there was the matter of Kabuto to consider, so for the sake of my sanity I'll take the body language at face value. (bow to the power of unintentional bad puns.)

Okay, the theory was that somehow, someone got wind of Sasuke's presence at the hospital and found it highly intriguing. So intriguing, in fact, that an occasion was created to 'test' his reactions and see exactly who/what Sasuke is. I suppose it might be possible, if Naruto's hanging place with his friends is awlways the same. After all, the attack happens conveniently when Naruto and Sasuke are still more or less around, and not a few subway stations away, at Naruto's den, on the same evening Naruto oh-so-conveniently informed Kabuto of his plans. Maybe Kabuto had already doubts about Sasuke before; they've certainly met one another before (weee for the first mention of Kabuto's name in the previous chapter being in Sasuke's narrative).

So far I think it's possible, I'm less happy with the second part of the theory in which Kabuto disposes of the two who might have known/said something to ruin the Cunning Plan - partly because it'd be too easy and partly because neither of them was the leader of the attack, unless I (or Sasuke? *snorts* no, I) missed something. So maybe he deliberately did it in order to judge Sasuke's reactions further? (if that's the case, Sasuke launching into the subroutine to stop Naruto was a very bad thing, and I'm not convinced the growing-a-personality thing could help it much.)

There's also the chance that I might be seeing too much there. But I tend to be paranoid about Kabuto. Freakin' wildcard types. *fascinated by Kabuto*

The picture you paint of Gai and Lee is all too easily imagined. …I suddenly have this image of the Malaussène family and its numerous abuse of hospital material and ambulancies. O_o

Jiraiya as pimp: that’d mean he has people working for him. I never pictured him as a leader, somehow; besides, as far as information-gathering is concerned (yes, I know. I mean spying.), it’d make him rely on a net of second-hand informers, wouldn’t it? I guess I picture him more as the type of person to do it himself. *throttles all the innuendos Jiraiya’s presence in the sentence generates* Or he might be retired, or not a very good pimp at all, too busy doing/ogling his workers to pay much attention to the money they bring back? Something that’d make people and Sasuke underestimate him?

Maybe I should start writing these fics in tandem.
*wibbles and meeps*

[identity profile] runespoor7.livejournal.com 2006-08-19 12:51 am (UTC)(link)
Well, there's always the dilettante/porn writer route. Or the Jiraiya as an (apparently?) incompetent pimp, which would throw people's expectations of him off at least two different ways. ...thing is, he really doesn't do anything in canon either; Tsunade was a medicnin, Orochimaru worked in the ANBU, Jiraiya...? I think the incompetent-pimp thing might work, though. Cause yeah, the funny.

[identity profile] bluefate.livejournal.com 2006-08-17 05:13 pm (UTC)(link)
Aww, Sasuke's kind of warming up to Naruto and Sakura...
Tsunade is awesome - "holding her own" oh, yeah.

Yeah, Sasuke's sharingan mode seems smooth enough. He seems to be unable to help acting like a cop, heh, and Naruto is his recruitment...^_^

I love how Sasuke is "He is grimly content with the idea" of being a sarcastic bastard.

I can't remember all the details from the previous chapters. Tsunade's "'oath be damned'"- do we reader know what she's talking about? Did she have a 'I will not kill ppl' or something to do with their attackers? Also, I forget, are there any clues on which side Kabuto's on? Whenever I see Kabuto I think of him as a traitor who should get stabbed in the face, but he works well if you want a collection of medics...I guess I'll always be susupicious of him...

[identity profile] inkanaitis.livejournal.com 2006-08-19 01:18 am (UTC)(link)
yes! i was worried that you'd abandoned this. I have so much love for this story.

I especially love this line.

Sasuke resists the urge to roll his eyes; then gives into it, because as illogical as they are, developing mannerisms means he is settling into his personality. His personality is more than verging on sarcastic bastard. He is grimly content with the idea.
tephra: Photo portrait of a doll with shaggy, dark orange and copper hair, wearing a pink slouchy hat and sky blue glasses. (Default)

[personal profile] tephra 2006-08-20 03:42 pm (UTC)(link)
*squee!* Little Creature icon!

[identity profile] erika06.livejournal.com 2006-08-20 04:04 am (UTC)(link)
OMG!!!! I loved it, I feel sad for Naruto though... I hope Sasuke, thinks about what he is going to do about him... Naruto is a good person... poor him, he is lonely and he was trying to protect the only persons he consider family... please pretty please don't let Naruto go to jail!!! *whimpers*

[identity profile] ktoth04.livejournal.com 2006-08-21 09:07 pm (UTC)(link)
awesomeness

[identity profile] ina-noranaya.livejournal.com 2006-08-23 12:04 am (UTC)(link)
*Dies of happiness at the thought of you writing these fics in tandem* You are in deed a writing machine.

What I love about this fic (aside from the sheer fun of furry!Naruto) is how you write Sasuke's thought processes. Damn subroutines. And the sharingan mode in this chapter is absolutely convincing. And I can't wait to find out what it is Naruto's hiding.

(I'd squee too, but guys aren't allowed to do that.)