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teamworkness, chapter 3
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wing_serenade was right and there was something lacking between chapters 2 and 3. So since i can't add more to chapter 2 since it's already posted and all (and sasuke is not talking, AGAIN), i added something to the beginning of chapter 3.
it's a quick scene, with more tell than show, but i really can't make it too long because the chapter is going to be heavy enough as it is.
(if i manage to finish that stupid sparring scene. rrrrgh.)
Well, the cuddling could have gone better -- they'd all been a little tense and there had been a few where-the-hell-should-I-put-my-hands moments -- but it had still been nice while it lasted.
Naruto could count the hugs he'd ever been involved in on one hand. Including the one where he'd been clinging to a dead, needle-full Sasuke. There had been a few flying tackles on Iruka and Kakashi, but most of the time his teachers were in the habit of dodging. So, even despite the clumsiness, and the way Sakura kept fidgeting as if she wanted to reach out and grab but thought it was improper, and the way Sasuke never quite relaxed and kept avoiding their eyes, he wasn't too keen on the letting go part.
Sasuke -- the sneaky bastard -- escaped first, disappearing in the kitchen to cook lunch, and Naruto had Sakura for himself for about ten minutes -- his nose in her hair and her hand on his chest, arms wrapped around each other, sheer bliss -- before she decided to go and help. She did seem to feel a little better than she had earlier, so he let go, for all that he wanted to cuddle longer.
The meal itself was awkward all of two minutes, with shifty eyes and Sakura blushing whenever she looked at either of them, and then Sasuke and him started fighting again -- about the ownership of the saltcellar of all things -- and everything was back to normal.
Normal, as in before-The-Night standard behavior.
Naruto didn't protest as he listened to them making plans, listing places and people to see, laws and regulations to check, income to calculate. He only kept them supplied in snacks, and made a few comments here and there, and discreetly brushed against them both, touching a waist here, a shoulder there, breath ghosting briefly against a bowed neck, all the while grinning like he had no clue he was doing anything out of the ordinary. If they were going to be stuck up about it, then he would have to get things moving on his own.
He held Sakura's hand when he walked her back to Ino's place, and then went home to Sasuke.
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more of chapter three here:
http://www.livejournal.com/users/askerian/150752.html
/Huh. Maybe your pink slut is not as ill-suited as I thought./
Naruto was too tired to comment about the demon's vocabulary. He just groaned softly, leaning forward to rest his hands on his knees.
'Glad she meets your approval. Now heal me up a little.'
The fox was smirking, he could feel it. /Weak. Beaten by his own female./
'Oi! She hasn't beaten me! I'm just letting her vent, that's all. Fuck, I didn't remember she could be so vicious.'
Though the strength levels were nothing alike, it was, in fact, quite reminiscent of his fights against Sasuke, if only for the sheer aggressiveness. Of course, she didn't have a varied array of taijutsu skills, so she was confined to some pretty basic moves, but she used these basic moves with such fury ...
'If only she had more power, she'd be...' She'd be close to their level, Sasuke and him. But her chakra reserves were low; she had almost no strength and no stamina compared to the two of them. It wasn't really her fault. They were both freaks, each in his own way.
/Fuckable./
'Yeah-- wait, no, that wasn't what I was going to say! I was going to say --'
He was knocked on his ass and ended up staring dumbly up at Sasuke. The black-haired ninja was standing with his back to him, a hand wrapped around Sakura's fist.
"Dodge, dumbass. Or get out of the playground."
Sakura gritted her teeth, and pulled her fist free. Her knuckles were bruised. Naruto made a note to buy her gloves; maybe they'd help.
"Sasuke-kun, you're still hurt," she said through clenched jaws. She was trying to soften her expression, but it didn't really work. Naruto wondered if she'd ever given that sort of I-AM-trying-to-be-patient-here-so-god-help-me look to Sasuke before; he sure had gotten his share of them.
"Not enough for it to matter," Sasuke sneered back, and even unable to see his face, Naruto knew that he was smirking; that smug, mocking, superior smile that made him want to...
THWACK.
...yeah, just that. Naruto cringed, rolling away as they flew over his head, Sasuke thrown back and Sakura jumping after him. He watched them worriedly for a few seconds, as Sasuke twisted to land on his feet even as Sakura pounced again. He didn't like the idea of them both sparring; Sasuke was a naturally vicious fighter who hated to lose -- what would happen if she managed to graze him and he instinctively counterattacked? And Sakura needed to hit something, not to have the bastard run circles around her without letting her land a hit.
/Feisty.../
Naruto grimaced and pretended he wasn't blushing. The scenarios the bastard fox was sending over were quite explicit. Graphic, even. 'Cut it out, hornball. I thought it was bestiality to you.'
/Seventeen years of not getting any. Even that goddamn pipe-smoking toad of yours is starting to look good. Besides.../
The image of a pink vixen was rather ridiculous, but there was something in the dainty, delicate paws, the slim and graceful body and the long, fluffy tail -- ack. He was so not thinking about a black, three-tailed fox either, with corded muscles rolling under tousled, midnight fur. He was NOT. 'Stop iiiiiiiit...'
"LOOK OUT, IDIOT!"
Sakura rolled through the space on which he'd been standing just a second before, kicking up a cloud of dust on her way, and immediately jumped back up. She thwapped him over the head in passing, throwing herself back at Sasuke.
Now I need to think up a way to get them from here to the next plot point, which is surprisingly difficult. I hate action scenes like this. x__x
also, GYAH!! crap, super-cool replies I haven't replied to. I suck! ;;__;;lissiel, _sachi, blackheisei, forgive me ! T_T
Naruto: Uhmmm... Sasuke? Sakura? You are both good at Henge, right?
Sasuke&Sakura: ?_?
Naruto: ... do you mind... changing into foxes?
Sasu&Saku: O.O;; PERVERT!
Kyuubi: ... bitches.
wing_serenade was right and there was something lacking between chapters 2 and 3. So since i can't add more to chapter 2 since it's already posted and all (and sasuke is not talking, AGAIN), i added something to the beginning of chapter 3. it's a quick scene, with more tell than show, but i really can't make it too long because the chapter is going to be heavy enough as it is.
(if i manage to finish that stupid sparring scene. rrrrgh.)
Well, the cuddling could have gone better -- they'd all been a little tense and there had been a few where-the-hell-should-I-put-my-hands moments -- but it had still been nice while it lasted.
Naruto could count the hugs he'd ever been involved in on one hand. Including the one where he'd been clinging to a dead, needle-full Sasuke. There had been a few flying tackles on Iruka and Kakashi, but most of the time his teachers were in the habit of dodging. So, even despite the clumsiness, and the way Sakura kept fidgeting as if she wanted to reach out and grab but thought it was improper, and the way Sasuke never quite relaxed and kept avoiding their eyes, he wasn't too keen on the letting go part.
Sasuke -- the sneaky bastard -- escaped first, disappearing in the kitchen to cook lunch, and Naruto had Sakura for himself for about ten minutes -- his nose in her hair and her hand on his chest, arms wrapped around each other, sheer bliss -- before she decided to go and help. She did seem to feel a little better than she had earlier, so he let go, for all that he wanted to cuddle longer.
The meal itself was awkward all of two minutes, with shifty eyes and Sakura blushing whenever she looked at either of them, and then Sasuke and him started fighting again -- about the ownership of the saltcellar of all things -- and everything was back to normal.
Normal, as in before-The-Night standard behavior.
Naruto didn't protest as he listened to them making plans, listing places and people to see, laws and regulations to check, income to calculate. He only kept them supplied in snacks, and made a few comments here and there, and discreetly brushed against them both, touching a waist here, a shoulder there, breath ghosting briefly against a bowed neck, all the while grinning like he had no clue he was doing anything out of the ordinary. If they were going to be stuck up about it, then he would have to get things moving on his own.
He held Sakura's hand when he walked her back to Ino's place, and then went home to Sasuke.
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more of chapter three here:
http://www.livejournal.com/users/askerian/150752.html
/Huh. Maybe your pink slut is not as ill-suited as I thought./
Naruto was too tired to comment about the demon's vocabulary. He just groaned softly, leaning forward to rest his hands on his knees.
'Glad she meets your approval. Now heal me up a little.'
The fox was smirking, he could feel it. /Weak. Beaten by his own female./
'Oi! She hasn't beaten me! I'm just letting her vent, that's all. Fuck, I didn't remember she could be so vicious.'
Though the strength levels were nothing alike, it was, in fact, quite reminiscent of his fights against Sasuke, if only for the sheer aggressiveness. Of course, she didn't have a varied array of taijutsu skills, so she was confined to some pretty basic moves, but she used these basic moves with such fury ...
'If only she had more power, she'd be...' She'd be close to their level, Sasuke and him. But her chakra reserves were low; she had almost no strength and no stamina compared to the two of them. It wasn't really her fault. They were both freaks, each in his own way.
/Fuckable./
'Yeah-- wait, no, that wasn't what I was going to say! I was going to say --'
He was knocked on his ass and ended up staring dumbly up at Sasuke. The black-haired ninja was standing with his back to him, a hand wrapped around Sakura's fist.
"Dodge, dumbass. Or get out of the playground."
Sakura gritted her teeth, and pulled her fist free. Her knuckles were bruised. Naruto made a note to buy her gloves; maybe they'd help.
"Sasuke-kun, you're still hurt," she said through clenched jaws. She was trying to soften her expression, but it didn't really work. Naruto wondered if she'd ever given that sort of I-AM-trying-to-be-patient-here-so-god-help-me look to Sasuke before; he sure had gotten his share of them.
"Not enough for it to matter," Sasuke sneered back, and even unable to see his face, Naruto knew that he was smirking; that smug, mocking, superior smile that made him want to...
THWACK.
...yeah, just that. Naruto cringed, rolling away as they flew over his head, Sasuke thrown back and Sakura jumping after him. He watched them worriedly for a few seconds, as Sasuke twisted to land on his feet even as Sakura pounced again. He didn't like the idea of them both sparring; Sasuke was a naturally vicious fighter who hated to lose -- what would happen if she managed to graze him and he instinctively counterattacked? And Sakura needed to hit something, not to have the bastard run circles around her without letting her land a hit.
/Feisty.../
Naruto grimaced and pretended he wasn't blushing. The scenarios the bastard fox was sending over were quite explicit. Graphic, even. 'Cut it out, hornball. I thought it was bestiality to you.'
/Seventeen years of not getting any. Even that goddamn pipe-smoking toad of yours is starting to look good. Besides.../
The image of a pink vixen was rather ridiculous, but there was something in the dainty, delicate paws, the slim and graceful body and the long, fluffy tail -- ack. He was so not thinking about a black, three-tailed fox either, with corded muscles rolling under tousled, midnight fur. He was NOT. 'Stop iiiiiiiit...'
"LOOK OUT, IDIOT!"
Sakura rolled through the space on which he'd been standing just a second before, kicking up a cloud of dust on her way, and immediately jumped back up. She thwapped him over the head in passing, throwing herself back at Sasuke.
Now I need to think up a way to get them from here to the next plot point, which is surprisingly difficult. I hate action scenes like this. x__x
also, GYAH!! crap, super-cool replies I haven't replied to. I suck! ;;__;;
lissiel, _sachi, blackheisei, forgive me ! T_TNaruto: Uhmmm... Sasuke? Sakura? You are both good at Henge, right?
Sasuke&Sakura: ?_?
Naruto: ... do you mind... changing into foxes?
Sasu&Saku: O.O;; PERVERT!
Kyuubi: ... bitches.
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Moooooooore!
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i have two sketches of fox!sakura and fox!sasuke, but if it's kyuubi x fox!sakusasu you want... XDDDD *looks innocent*
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I just love your drawings, so I'll take any excuse to beg for one. ^_^
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GamabuntaxKyuubi=OTP
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The image of a pink vixen was rather ridiculous, but there was something in the dainty, delicate paws, the slim and graceful body and the long, fluffy tail -- ack. He was so not thinking about a black, three-tailed fox either, with corded muscles rolling under tousled, midnight fur. He was NOT./
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Naruto is going to go into furries hentai. WAHHHH!!!!
I think I will go lie down and be sick now.
Awesome chapter by the way.
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And the henge talk is making me grin like an idiot/pervert. XDD Yaaaay.
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::sits down to wait for some after-fight sexing::
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Can't wait to see what happens next!
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~Sam
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and then Sasuke and him started fighting again Should be "then he and Sasuke started." Nominative pronoun, please!
The transition from that new beginning to the "Naruto rose to consciousness" feels a bit abrupt, but that could sort of be passed off as intentional, given that Kyuubi took over for a bit. Also, I really like Kyuubi as a pervert. There is something massively amusing about a giant, vicious, deadly fox-demon having as his first priority... not death, not destruction, not vengeance... but SEX!
Good luck dragging them through the rest of the plot. :-)
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"We" - "Sasuke and I"
"Us" - "Sasuke and me"
When you can mean "we", write "Sasuke and I" etc..
I also felt that the transition was a tad too abrupt.
Want more, though.
|Meduza|
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But don't get me wrong, this is adorable beyond words as it is.
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I felt that it was not explained that she was going to send the letter that night to her father about her little tryst, which is partially why I felt the transition was abrupt. I do like the tender awkwardness that they are going through as a result of not really knowing how to handle their relationship now. It's very endearing and different from the first part of Teamwork in which they were all in panic mode and seemed to have more of an excuse to have touchy/feely moments. Now, that excuse is gone.
The sparring scene seems fine to me as well as Naruto's worries in regards to Sasuke's control issues when it comes to fighting, so I'm looking forward to more on that.
I guess the only other thing I'm wondering about is what happened to the spar that Ino and Sakura were going to have?