gw wolfbrothers

[askerian]

Damn it, OCs, stop being ethical AND smart, you're figuring things out way too early. *EDIT EDIT* auuugh.

Also, introducing five new people in one scene might be a bit much. :X I'll see if I can cut one off, but I don't see which one... :(

Seeing the two wolves side by side it was even more obvious Chiquito was still very young; he was fuzzy all over and round-bodied and his paws were huge compared to his legs. He could get under Killer's barrel without needing to hunker down more than a couple of inches. Killer jerked when he did it and sidestepped, but it seemed more reflexive unease and confusion than true, aggression-edged wariness.

After that of course it was butt-sniffing time. Urk. "Thanks for sharing, buddy."

Shh quiet. Important smells!

"Yeah, I'd say. So, the pup likes burritos?"

Makisig gave a guilty snicker. "Probably shouldn't let him have them, but oh, the soulful eyes."

Comments

[askerian]

oh god yes, me too. the heck are those names. I think it contributed to my inability to stay engaged in the story. Also the bazilion gods with very similar names. urgh.

[tephra]

I like the stories, obviously, so I finished them, but dammit Weber, think about your readers when you name people/things. >:C

Weber apparently is incapable of not having an annoying writing quirk. If he's writing anything with a modern military he infodumps a ton of unnecessary military hardware specs (Honor Harrington books, OMFG). If he's writing fantasy he can't resist tossing random extra letters in names and making them into tossed salads where you can only tell them apart by the positions of the tomatoes.