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askerian ([personal profile] askerian) wrote2005-10-12 03:53 am
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(GW) garou, chapter 34, first two scenes

I'll answer to people's ficcage later, promise. I did read them -- even tho I shouldn't have because I should have been translating. XD

Also have a mini rant on a stupid review I got, but i'm fighting the urge to wank in public. enable me plz.

*translate translate*



The infiltration was rather easy, finally. It was snowing lightly, and the guards' visibility was considerably shortened. On top of that, the soldiers were distracted from outside threats by the conference being held at this very moment, knowing that if something went wrong between Romafeller and OZ they'd have to react very fast, and the two factions spent almost as much time glaring at each other than watching their surroundings.

In the end, Trowa and Quatre didn't even need to attack anyone. Trowa was noticed twice while he opened the way, and since he was wearing an OZ uniform and moved like he knew exactly where he was going, no one ever thought of stopping him.

It was going way too easily for Quatre's peace of mind. He just hoped the dozen of contingency plans he was thinking up would be enough.

* * *

The meeting was dragging its metaphorical heels. Noin was bored to tears; everyone was prattling on and dancing around subjects, and the only things she needed to do were stand behind Zechs, watch the exits and the other assistants, and hand over documents and references in case he needed them. Which rarely happened because Zechs' memory worked just fine and he remembered what he needed to support his arguments on his own.

Finally, his Romafeller counterpart concluded and got up, and she sighed discreetly, relieved. End of the meeting?

Apparently not, because now they were back to exchanging empty and apparently innocent politeness. She didn't listen to the exact words; one of the reasons why she'd never rise any higher in the ranks was her total lack of interest for underhanded, poisoned barbs wrapped in smooth smiles that were so necessary to politics.

As long as Zechs had been able to concentrate on concrete decision, he'd been in perfect control, but when the enemy Colonel leaned toward him with a falsely friendly smile, patted his shoulder paternally and asked with solicitude how he was feeling these days, he growled. Noin jumped. He was growing tense, as if about to pounce. Neither Zechs nor General Kushrenada, nor Une, Otto or herself had managed to determine to which point the animal stayed present during the waning moon, and she had hoped...

Noin rushed to his side, touched his arm to distract him, and asked in a mildly concerned tone: "Still that cold?"

It was one of the worst lies she'd ever tried, but she couldn't think of anything else. She could see the Rommies watch them strangely and could only hope that Zechs play along. Luckily, Zechs got it and started coughing softly, as if trying to control a huge coughing fit. Cutting short the usual post-meeting proceedings, Noin excused them both and guided him -- or dragged him -- out of the room, firmly pushing out of her mind a vision of muscles tearing under her hand, of a mouth full of fangs snapping closed on her throat. Otto followed, expressionless, placing himself on the other side of the Colonel the second the heavy door of the meeting room closed behind them.

"Zechs?"

He growled again, his face slowly twisting in anger. Otto and Noin exchanged an alarmed look, wondering if they should run.

"Zechs, calm down. What's the problem?" she asked calmly, hoping to get his aggressive instincts to go back to sleep.

He didn't answer, pushing them off before stalking with long steps down the corridor. Reaching the end, he turned left without hesitation. Noin tried to follow, bus Otto held her back.

"Give him some space, Lieutenant," he advised.

She acquiesced, horrified. It was the first time since the full moon that he... that he... relapsed. There, that was a relapse, she told herself as she followed him, giving him a wide berth. It was an illness, a catastrophe even, but not a curse. He was still the man she'd met at the Academy. He just had a ... problem.

A problem they were still trying to define limits and conditions of. A problem that was more than probably highly contagious, and could prove fatal for his circle of friends and subordinates.

Otto tapped her shoulder, pulling her out of her musings.

Not waiting for them, the blond man was advancing in the corridors without hesitation, as if following something. He hesitated sometimes at crossroads, but, following clues that Noin and Otto couldn't discern, always found the tracks again.

Finally they arrived to a computer room. Zechs stepped over the knocked out guards without even looking at them; Otto checked that they were alive while Noin followed Zechs inside, weapon in hand.

Zechs checked the room thoroughly, growling once again when he caught sight of a computer just as it went back to sleep mode.

"They left."

"Are you sure?" Noin asked, finishing her methodic check of the rows of desks.

Zechs opened his mouth as if he was going to snap back rudely, then closed it and nodded instead. Noin felt a knot of fear untie inside her; he was going back to normal.

"I'm sure," he affirmed in a still intense, but not as aggressive voice. "I'd ... smell them."

It always threw her to be reminded of his senses.

"Can you guess how long ago they left?" Otto asked calmly as he joined them inside.

The blond man shook his head, clearly frustrated.

"Not that long..."

He sighed and, giving way to his frustration, hit the wall with his fist.

The air vent grate detached from the wall slowly and fell on the floor, clanging loudly. At the very end of the tunnel, something that could have been a rat disappeared in another conduit. Except it was a shoe.

"... I see what you meant," Noin commented in a strangled tone as she reached out to hit the alarm.

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Okay, it's all fresh from translation, meaning that grammar horrors and typos and wrong words abound. If you catch one, please tell me because I suck and probably won't notice. ;_;

[identity profile] padfut-n-prongs.livejournal.com 2005-10-12 02:10 am (UTC)(link)
man, i must be behind in the ff.n chapters cause i'm lost o_O; but i love the main OZ characters, so i'll be happy in my confusetion ^_^;

[identity profile] sunhawk16.livejournal.com 2005-10-12 02:15 am (UTC)(link)
*purrs* Wow... that was quick! You are too good to us! ^___^
I like the dynamic you've got going with Noin... her loyalty battling underneath that professional exterior, with her fear. Nicely done. She and Otto make an interesting team. They are usually at odds with one another in fics, and it's a different take to see them working together to protect Zechs. Well... as much as Zechs will allow. ^^;

[identity profile] chibirisuchan.livejournal.com 2005-10-12 02:25 am (UTC)(link)
If it went anything like "UPDATE THIS OTHER STORY ON DEMAND OR I KEEL J00 DED 'CAUSE I AM A WHINY BRAT IN ANOTHER FANDOM", you're not alone. I've gotten more than my share of those in several fandoms... ^^;;; much sympathy in any case, whiny-demanding and/or missing-the-point reviews can be pretty frustrating!

(scurries off to keep scribbling on bribefic... don't think I'll have it postable tonight and tomorrow night I'm claimed and this weekend I've got mad cooking class prepwork to do again, but hopefully that leaves more scribbletime Thursday or maybe Friday...?)

[identity profile] chibirisuchan.livejournal.com 2005-10-12 02:26 am (UTC)(link)
(sweatdrop) can't really read or comment on fic, sorry; (a) I know nothing about Gundam Wing beyond the five guys' names and (b) I haven't read the other 34 chapters or so! Just enabling rant mode if you want it.

(tiptoes out again)

[identity profile] chibirisuchan.livejournal.com 2005-10-12 02:55 am (UTC)(link)
Even WITH a warning, I'd figure the sane human reaction to first seeing a werewolf transformation would be to have a moderate to severe nervous breakdown and start looking for shotguns and other massive weaponry anyway; but since my general impression is that none of the Gundam boys are particularly sane, it doesn't surprise me that they didn't freak out, and it also doesn't surprise me that sane and unwarned people would...

did that sentence make sense...? Sorry, the tireder I get, the longer my sentences start getting... ^^;;

[identity profile] darknessdivine.livejournal.com 2005-10-12 03:14 am (UTC)(link)
*delurks* Oh good, I thought it was me - I'd reviewed Two Knights earlier and thought I'd said something stupid. XD
*latches onto leg* Can I have your woman babies? :D~

[identity profile] silverkiiri.livejournal.com 2005-10-12 03:22 am (UTC)(link)
Garou! ::does a happy dance:: I love this fic so much. ^_^ I didn't expect to like reading about the ozzies so much, but every person in the fic who got infected has had such a different reaction that it is really a pleasure to read about each one. I love the differences in how OZ and the G boys are infected and how they handle it.

And in reference to the rant: I am totally with you. If I had to see the man I admired and loved go through something like that, I would be damned lucky to handle it as well as Noin and Une did. And Treize and Zechs can't be of much help seeing as how they don't even have a clue how it happened in the first place. ::shakes head:: Do most people just not get that? It would be VERY WEIRD to see this from Noin's POV. they would freak out too, no matter what they say.

In short: Bravo.

[identity profile] silverkiiri.livejournal.com 2005-10-12 03:22 am (UTC)(link)
I hate doing this, but I had to say it. Your icon is teh kyute. ^_^

[identity profile] darknessdivine.livejournal.com 2005-10-12 03:28 am (UTC)(link)
omg *blush* I would die of SQUEE if you brought back Two Knights, becasue it's so fscking awesome and brings out the GWing fangirl in me *blathers*

And I must say, Teamwork actually turned me on to threesomes (or is it a foursome because of that sezzy Kyuubi? :D). *licks back*

*loves on*
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[personal profile] edenfalling 2005-10-12 03:53 am (UTC)(link)
Oooh! Write it, write it, write it! I will... I will stop being a lazy bum and sit down and write the next chapter of the fic of your choice, and write it fast, like two days max, if you write another chapter of "Two Knights"!
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[personal profile] edenfalling 2005-10-12 04:01 am (UTC)(link)
Hehehe. Minor cliffhangers are fun.

*whips out editing hat*

He just hoped the dozen of contingency plans he was thinking up would be enough. --Kill the 'of'. It is evil and misplaced.

As long as Zechs had been able to concentrate on concrete decision, he'd been in perfect control, --I think you mean 'decisions, although I'm somewhat confused by the phrase in general. Do you mean that he was okay so long as he and the other guy were interacting within the framework of a professional meeting, but he snapped when it got more personal?

She could see the Rommies watching them strangely and could only hope that Zechs would play along. Luckily, Zechs got it and started coughing softly, as if trying to control a huge coughing fit. --I changed the verbs because they were screwy. Also, using 'coughing' twice in one sentence is perhaps a bit much.

Noin tried to follow, bus Otto held her back. --Typo.

*removes editing hat, and bows*
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[personal profile] edenfalling 2005-10-12 04:02 am (UTC)(link)
Or, if you like the 'of,' change 'dozen' to 'dozens'. That works too.

[identity profile] meanne77.livejournal.com 2005-10-12 07:11 am (UTC)(link)
*va jeter un oeil aux reviews*
XD Laisse-moi deviner... Katten ?
Go on and rant! J'adore, c'est distrayant !
*chu*

[identity profile] padfut-n-prongs.livejournal.com 2005-10-12 09:17 am (UTC)(link)
o__O no kidding, no i know i'm out of it. x__X i haven't checked ff.n in, like 2 months

v_v forgive me for being a bad reader and loosing track of ff.n pretties?

[identity profile] sunhawk16.livejournal.com 2005-10-12 11:14 am (UTC)(link)
I don't know that they have issues with each other in the show, but in all the fics, they always seem to have this rivalry thing going on over Zechs. ^^;

[identity profile] meanne77.livejournal.com 2005-10-12 04:06 pm (UTC)(link)
Des longs, ça existent pas vraiment v_v mais je vais voir ce que je peux faire... Tu tiens à cet ordre seme/uke ou du Yuuri/Wolfram convient aussi (parce que c'est plus courant, quand même...)

[identity profile] ever-in-eden.livejournal.com 2005-10-12 06:44 pm (UTC)(link)
~Garou ~Garou ~Garou!!!~~ *wolf-whistles* *is one happy, happy fangirl*

Ow, the animal instincts, though troublesome, proved quite useful for once... ^^ I love how you've portrayed the girls' reactions! They were realistic for one if not made just to fit into every stuck-up's personal fantasies or something *growls* -.- and much milder than mine would have been, had I been in their places.

Translating the whole thing must be quite annoying *much web-ish support* >.< I'd love to know the General's and Zechs POV on the events, and surely to read what happens with our Amazing Five and their own take on the Ozzies leaders transformations. Will they find out for sure? When? How??? *loves on and patiently anticipates for more* ^.^

And don't ever let stupid pricks get you down; we all know that they are so not worth your attention, much less your frustration

(Anonymous) 2005-10-12 07:02 pm (UTC)(link)
Elle n'est pas "sorpotive"; ça veut probablement dire absolument autre chose. Attends ! C'est "Zach's friends", c'est ça ? En fait c'était deux autres personnes dans une autre fic...
Merci pour le chapitre !

(Anonymous) 2005-10-13 12:45 am (UTC)(link)
I do realize it's kinda late, but... I really think you should check Caspian1 at FF.net. Most of her fics are short, introspective one-shots and her voices are always kinda... well, I guess "cynical" is the best word (and doesn't that work well, considering they're ninja).

She always brings up the things you seem to like - the weird relationships, the never-truly-breakable bonds teamwork seems to form, the blurry feelings you identify.

Most of the fics are Team 7-centric, more or less, but since you were looking for not-quite-romance and Sasuke, you'd better read "Blood Equals Thicker" (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2520811/1/). One-shot, introspective, set after Sasuke leaves for the Sound, no pairings unless you look at it sideways. Sasuke thinking about the things he doesn't allow hiself to hold dear.
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[personal profile] edenfalling 2005-10-13 01:06 am (UTC)(link)
Sooo...? Are you going to write it? Pleasepleaseplease!

[identity profile] stitched-scars.livejournal.com 2005-10-13 03:31 am (UTC)(link)
Hmmmmmmm. I tried my hand at writin' a drabble-thing from Kyuubi's perspective, but it rather morphed into a blend of your Kyuubi and the Kyuubi in Idiosyncrasy by ChibiHaku.

So I tried. And I dedicate it to you anyways. *sigh*

Goosebump shudder and Kyuubi is gonna get out out and out, walking/prowling/sliding around and yeah but just watch him go ‘cuz there’s no way you’re going to stop him baby, no way at all. Just you and him and the brat and the bitch and hey, he can deal with that. He can deal with that just fine if this little tame fox can roam a bit, can claim a bit, of what is his and should be his and will be his if you just wait. Just a bit longer. He’s made plans, plans and damn lies and he’s mixing up the phrases, mixing up everything he’s siphoned off the brat’s brain, but that’s okay. He has time. He’ll remember it again ‘cuz that’s all he can do, baby .That’s all he can do inside there, waiting and whispering and remembering every damn thing that’s happened to him so that he can plan. Everything you’ve done, your fucking ancestors have done, and Kyuubi’ll get you. He’ll get you and tear you and love you and leave you, just like you deserve. You know it and he’ll use that. He’ll use that like he’ll use and conquer and mark the bitch the brat and all that is his, baby, all that is his. You’re all his, his his his forever. Just wait. Kyuubi’s gonna get you hard vicious swift and good.

[and and the mixing up the phrases comes from the fact that the phrase originally branched off of 'lies, damn lies and statistics']

[identity profile] meanne77.livejournal.com 2005-10-13 07:52 am (UTC)(link)
Je regarderai ce que j'ai sur mon DD ce soir ^_^
Tu veux que des anglaises ? Je risque de moins être objective pour les françaises, lol.

J'ai détesté Conrad à une époque, ça va mieux maintenant. Pas au point de l'apprécier mais il n'est plus une menace, lol. T'en es où ? Tu sais que le 53 est sorti hier ? Ca s'amélior à partir de maintenant, je t'assure, y'a des jolis moments YuuRam ! En fait, ça commence à s'améliorer depuis l'épisode 50...

[identity profile] windshades.livejournal.com 2005-10-13 01:07 pm (UTC)(link)
Yay for more Garou! I love that Zechs gets all growly because he can smell the boys invading his territory. One other typo that edenfalling missed : /Finally they arrived to a computer room./ I think you mean "at a computer room." ^___^

>.>

[identity profile] darknessdivine.livejournal.com 2005-10-16 03:56 pm (UTC)(link)
*lurks back in*

*tempt?* (http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y92/kyarorin/ficfanarts/twoknightssketch.jpg)

Re: >.>

[identity profile] darknessdivine.livejournal.com 2005-10-18 02:47 am (UTC)(link)
:D~ Any plot pulled out your ass, hon, is thousands of times better than half the crap on FF.net Assplots from Askerian are Good Things. XD

I'm sooo sorry it's such a crappy scan, but I will ink and color and make pretty for Two Knights.

question ^^?

[identity profile] imillien.livejournal.com 2005-10-25 10:34 pm (UTC)(link)
Hello,

Thank you very much for two new chapters :3
I'm writing to ask why the doctor and the nurse that took care of Zechs died after he bite them? Was it because it was too close to full moon and they wouldn't have enough time to change?

And well sorry if I seem pushy, it's just a suggestion, but when I read about Wufei's transformation I just thought that a white tiger would suite him more than a regular one. (or maybe PANDA ^_^)

Re: question ^^?

[identity profile] imillien.livejournal.com 2005-10-26 10:29 am (UTC)(link)
Wow your explanation was long. I was actually amazed that you had a will to write it so long. Not that I complain it cleared out a lot for me.

Panda was just a small joke on my part ^_^ I thought it would be funny if Wufei end up being such a harmless animal (it would suite him in a parody of your fic). Also it comes from this cute official picture of chibi GW boys holding some animal (H -black bear; D -black panther; T -lion; Q -camel & W -panda).

As for why a white tiger I had to think about it so it wouldn't be just a "it looks cool" reason... although it does :3
I wouldn't use a world "royal" for a tiger. For me it's naturally attached to a lion's description and also Treize (so I can't wait to read if you make Treize a lion or some other animal).
"Wufei's a bronze-yellow tiger because that's more or less the color of his skin." I had a problem with that one but you said that their animal's fur is usually that of their hair color and both tigers have black umm markings. Also Wufei usually wears white.
Wufei might not consider himself "special enough" but he is both special and rear. When he first appeared in anime I thought: "what kind of historical drama did that guy come from?" Even Treize said to him well I don't remember what exactly he said but it was something like "you are one of a kind" (I'm a 13x5 lover ^_-)
Also he is a bit "leave me alone" and "you so don't even come close to my standards" and that could be consider umm royal in someway (rather bad than good but that is why we all love Wufei ^_^)

Anyway it was just a feeling I got so it's hard for me to explain in words. I just didn't want to leave it with "it looks cool" as an only reason.