Hm. Thinking about the traditions one, maybe a POV change would help? Or focusing more of family traditions rather than holiday ones. All those family traditions from each individual and how everyone participates? Eh, just random ideas.

I love that Denzel has Tifa's last name. Somehow that just made me *heart*. And it sounds like he has some shenganigans planned. Phi seems like well developed character.

Also: there are only a few limited pervy things one can do with a baseball bat. What the hell has Denzel walked in on before to put that thought in his head....?

I didn't quite catch why the kid's thought Zack was broken. That was probably intentional, come to think of it. Which makes me think that's a plot point of either Jenova's creepiness or Zack's love life...or both.