I'm loving how you are portraying Zack to have a knack for handling limp/unresponsive things given his canon future. Plus I'm pretty sure that the naming story of gabriel isn't much better than the first name that you garbled at with a grumpy look on your face...cos yeah, the whole 'you named the name because I made a noise at and ignored my troubled look'
The way you write with his voice but not as him saying it ("or perhaps a bowel movement, but... heh.") is really nifty and subtle - it may be my most favourite technical part of your writing (because there is too much love for your situations and characterisations to call it my favourite part of your writing fullstop)
I also love that they are his, and will take his last name, I mean I know it is logical -cant have a brood of kids the same age with different last names to the father- but it still touched me somehow.
(second charcoalcat's is he wearing boots still cos that would be lolsy, but he probably took em off aye) (++ so glad that you drew their faces ! GLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE, i would have asked for that in this comment <3<3)
Re: waking up/early morning, 2/2
The way you write with his voice but not as him saying it ("or perhaps a bowel movement, but... heh.") is really nifty and subtle - it may be my most favourite technical part of your writing (because there is too much love for your situations and characterisations to call it my favourite part of your writing fullstop)
I also love that they are his, and will take his last name, I mean I know it is logical -cant have a brood of kids the same age with different last names to the father- but it still touched me somehow.
(second charcoalcat's is he wearing boots still cos that would be lolsy, but he probably took em off aye)
(++ so glad that you drew their faces ! GLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE, i would have asked for that in this comment <3<3)