Since I'm more in the mood to re-re-re-re-read Teamwork than I am to work on the websites I should be working on....
Chapter 2: Sasuke hands Sakura some rope to tie her dress at the waist. "Rope" brings to mind something fairly thick, on the order of 15-20mm, so maybe cord would be better. Or twine I suppose, but that suggests something rather rough, and string might be too thin.
I know I asked before about this and you answered, somewhere, but Kiba's reaction to Sasuke, the hint of fear seems out of place. Maybe a bit more fleshing out there to explain it.
And Anko of course. I explained it to myself as her associating Sakura's apparent actions with her own relationship with Orochimaru but it always felt a bit off to me. I assumed you had something else in mind that I just couldn't think of since I haven't gotten that far in canon yet.
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Chapter 2: Sasuke hands Sakura some rope to tie her dress at the waist. "Rope" brings to mind something fairly thick, on the order of 15-20mm, so maybe cord would be better. Or twine I suppose, but that suggests something rather rough, and string might be too thin.
I know I asked before about this and you answered, somewhere, but Kiba's reaction to Sasuke, the hint of fear seems out of place. Maybe a bit more fleshing out there to explain it.
And Anko of course. I explained it to myself as her associating Sakura's apparent actions with her own relationship with Orochimaru but it always felt a bit off to me. I assumed you had something else in mind that I just couldn't think of since I haven't gotten that far in canon yet.