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2007-01-26 02:01 am (UTC)
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I don't understand all the fuss the "curvacious mountains on her chest" seems to be a very creative turn at imagery *snicker*
Is it just me or does a lot of nothing happen in that very short 1st chapter? Only cause its you Asuka I read almost all of that crap.
Seriously though, if I had to critique this it wold be longer than the chapter itself! Good luck!!!^^
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Is it just me or does a lot of nothing happen in that very short 1st chapter? Only cause its you Asuka I read almost all of that crap.
Seriously though, if I had to critique this it wold be longer than the chapter itself! Good luck!!!^^