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askerian: it's so disappointing, when you find a fic that's good-ish, but the choice of words is approximative and the characters, while IC, are handled... kinda clumsilyaskerian: a bit too much like a laundry list of "so X is this and that and he tends to say things like this and that"askerian: because you keep wanting to point out what's wrong with the story, but technically, nothing is wrongaskerian: but it's still jarringaskerian: it's disappointing, because it's almost yay!goodaskerian: ...and that almost is really all the difference in the world[Bad username or site: Saro Lynne @ livejournal.com]: Oh yeah. It's like the literary equivalent of being slightly tone deaf or something.
*loves on Saro for wording it good for me* T___T
In other news, fic recs!
phoenix_melody: Oracle: a Neji-centric fic, heavy on the Hyuuga clan study, internal politics and angst. Slow to update. Neji is blinded during a mission, and now he's going to die. DDD: It's really good, great characterisation, the angst isn't shoved at us and some lines are really excellent. Oh, Neji, you -- you -- aurgh. ;_;edonohana: good Sand Sib oneshots, and for those of you into Saiyuki, many very niceToday, Dad and brothers weren't home for dinner, so mom took me to the vietnamese restaurant. All-you-can eat buffet. mmmmmmmmmmmmm. Now I sleep. still digesting, and also sotired. will reply to feedback tomorrow love you everyone oh hé kin faudra qu'on se téléphone ce weekend ou kekchose câlincopine... yeah.
*flops* ♥ =____= ♥
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I've been working on the next chapter this past week!no subject
I was going to review properly later on, because sleep deprivation =/= coherent reviews, and it was easier to rec quickly. But since you're here! XD
I think the present tense really adds to the story -- makes it more immediate and full of suspense; since it's not in the past, it takes away a layer of distance between us an Neji, and adds some uncertainty as to his future, immediate or farther away. A couple of times I've found the tenses probably slipped a bit, but I'm not sure because um, not a native speaker. XD;;; So it really adds a lot to the story, and so yay for you using it. Me loves~
rite moar plz.
D; *bricked*
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The present tense is perhaps one of the hardest things to maintain. At first, only the muddled part of the first chapter was supposed to be in the present tense, but when it came time to switch to the normal third person, it just wouldn't work. I have the worst time writing description, especially anything that's not sight, and trying to put it in past tense made it almost impossible. But yeah, I really do like the added immediacy, but that was just an awesome bonus. XD
*pets* Don't worry about the not a native speaker thing. Chances are pretty high that I have slipped up with the tenses at least a handful of times, although my beta and I have tried to keep that to a minimum. It's hard to write in the present tense and keep everything straight.
I have a little over 100 words as of last night. >.>; I'm hoping to get the next chapter out this upcoming month. And if I don't, you can usually find my progress on my lj--that's where I'll post snippets and teasers. Which is few and far between all the rest of my stuff, but hey.
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