As I see it, there are two options for the focus problem.
1. The Kurama and Hiei way. They completely stole the show, by remaining secondary characters, albeit very important secondary characters. They're Yuusuke's true counterparts; first as teammates, then second-in-command for three different Makai lords.
2. Shift the focus. Make the narrator Askerian. Alizea becomes the catalyst for driving the plot and bringing all the other people in, but it's Askerian making the record of it. Therefore it becomes his story, about how he got caught up in this series of events, how he changed, what he learned... not Alizea.
And don't make Askerian a woman. Part of how he grows is learning to accept Reiyel. Being able to do that even past one's "coming of age" (BULLSHIT) is extremely relevant as regards the current social changes in the post-industrial world.
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1. The Kurama and Hiei way. They completely stole the show, by remaining secondary characters, albeit very important secondary characters. They're Yuusuke's true counterparts; first as teammates, then second-in-command for three different Makai lords.
2. Shift the focus. Make the narrator Askerian. Alizea becomes the catalyst for driving the plot and bringing all the other people in, but it's Askerian making the record of it. Therefore it becomes his story, about how he got caught up in this series of events, how he changed, what he learned... not Alizea.
And don't make Askerian a woman. Part of how he grows is learning to accept Reiyel. Being able to do that even past one's "coming of age" (BULLSHIT) is extremely relevant as regards the current social changes in the post-industrial world.