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[askerian]

karit wrote a T7 threesome one-shot called Work in Progress (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2471469/1/ ), and while it isn't that long, it doesn't feel like a summary of a real story (just enough details to get people imagining and going aww), and the writing is so simple and amusing, so easy to read, but still hints at so much angst underneath (whoa for subtly implied WAHH;_;-ness) -- but in a light way that doesn't make me want to stab sasuke's eyeballs out for whining. so yay. It's a very cute fic and you all shall go there and review because aww. That is all.


edit: OMFG read Echoes too. SAKURA. TT__TT

Comments

[karit.livejournal.com]

Wow, um, thanks for the rec! *horribly embarrassed* And thank you so, so much for the lovely reviews. I can never read them again because my head will explode from the relocation of all the blood in my entire body to my face (red, red cheeks), but thank you!

On a more serious note, thanks for the feedback on my characterization and the little details I added. I really, really appreciate that! I'll try to think of a way to rewrite the ending... I really felt that was a problem, but I just couldn't figure out what to do with it. Hopefully I'll think of something!

[askerian]

XD!!! *cuddlesquishes* embarrassed? nonono. this was a good fic and it's been days and days since i could find a good fic and you hit everything that makes me go AHH. in a fic, so it was deserved. (sasuke!!!! T__T)

I think it's a good idea to mirror the idea at the beginning, that Sasuke lost a part of himself that day -- and then add something about how that doesn't matter anymore/that doesn't matter as much/it always will matter, but he's complete in other ways now. or something like that. because it comes full circle, but in a way it shows that there's hope. so yay. I can't find a good way to formulate it, though, but seeing as it's your fic and i'm just giving suggestions, feel free to disregard any or all of it. ^__^;;

[karit.livejournal.com]

No, no! Any and all suggestions are appreciated! Especially since you make some really good points. Those are definitely things I'm going to take into account if I do end up rewriting the ending.

Thanks for taking the time to comment. ^-^

[askerian]

... now i got a sentence fluttering here and there and i can't catch it, but it's about how it doesnt matter if he's incomplete because then naruto and sakura can fit in the cracks or something. x_x

XD heh. i don't know about you, but once a fic is posted, i don't edit anymore, unless the problem is really OMG awful. it doesn't matter that much though ^^; if you hadnt pointed it out i'm pretty sure no one would have noticed XD

[karit.livejournal.com]

...wow, that's good. *enthralled*

No, I don't usually edit once I've posted, either. ^_^; I probably won't, unless something major occurs to me... I'm a spelling nazi, and there have been times I've found a typo in one of my fics, and can't make the effort to fix it. Usually it does get fixed eventually, mostly when I need to edit something else about the fic and can't put it off, but otehrwise... not so much with the editing. It's too much of a pain. ^-^; I should, but yeah...

And now someone tells me. ;_; I should just learn to keep my mouth shut, huh? XDXDXD