One thing I recall vaguely (could be wrong) from your previous drafts was that you'd set the story in the US, and had the various guys moving from military to (civilian) police. Just a note, b/c I'm not sure if I'd mentioned this before, and I realized the difference when watching a French movie (in which a military officer does exactly that). In the US, the two have no connection, and to be a cop you still have to go through the academy, basically starting over on your career. (It's because military doesn't get training in law, and cops are going to need to know state law, not federal law, anyway.)

But, as I understand it, it's a different notion if you were military (officer) and were to go into a federal agency -- like the CIA, or the DEA, or the FBI. You still must have a college degree, but you'd end up as a Special Agent, gun-carrying, law-enforcement, and all that. You wouldn't have to go back to school, plus your skills might be more useful in terms of ops and whatnot. Just FYI, since I recall having a serious moment of wtfery before I figured out that it's b/c French & USian have major differences in that respect.

As for the rest, I love the extra stuff you're putting in, and the changes/revisions you've made, thickening the story further. Never you mind about what I've finished or not -- did you really think I'd be fussy about that? -- you just go ahead and write it. That way, I don't have to!