The thing about Tumblr is that the comments are too short to be useful and I always feel weird about having to put somebody else's post on my own blog just to say hey, I like this! (Which I do, btw.) And then AO3 comments are too, I dunno, public for me to feel comfortable saying hey, I think there are two places that could use a tiny bit of tweaking. To wit:
Karkat stares deadpan at him for a few seconds, and then goes, "You're aware the only reason I don't trip you overboard is you're carrying my cell phone, right?"
This is not in any way incorrect, but the phrasing is slightly odd. I would say "the only reason I WON'T trip you" or "the only reason I'M NOT TRIPPING you" instead. English has been leaning more and more toward present participle verb constructions over the past few generations. I have no idea why, but there it is.
Yeah, John is hit or miss when it's about talking to the press; he has a good contact with them, and they usually like him, but he's not as tight-fisted with info they shouldn't have as Rose is.
Contact is not quite the right word in this situation. I'd use rapport or connection instead.
Anyway, aside from those tiny quibbles, this is an excellent chapter! I really liked all the family interaction, the pool scene was delicious, and I'm curious both about the continuing murders and Felt case and what exactly may or may not be going on with Kurloz, Calloz, and (I presume?) Caliborn.
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Karkat stares deadpan at him for a few seconds, and then goes, "You're aware the only reason I don't trip you overboard is you're carrying my cell phone, right?"
This is not in any way incorrect, but the phrasing is slightly odd. I would say "the only reason I WON'T trip you" or "the only reason I'M NOT TRIPPING you" instead. English has been leaning more and more toward present participle verb constructions over the past few generations. I have no idea why, but there it is.
Yeah, John is hit or miss when it's about talking to the press; he has a good contact with them, and they usually like him, but he's not as tight-fisted with info they shouldn't have as Rose is.
Contact is not quite the right word in this situation. I'd use rapport or connection instead.
Anyway, aside from those tiny quibbles, this is an excellent chapter! I really liked all the family interaction, the pool scene was delicious, and I'm curious both about the continuing murders and Felt case and what exactly may or may not be going on with Kurloz, Calloz, and (I presume?) Caliborn.