Your Sasuke-voice is amazing, no need to worry about it, seriously!
i love how he slowly comes to realize what it is that he feels, and his mind works in concepts, not images or words. Very Sasuke-like to catch himself feeling, and to work hard on clearing out his emotions, not liking ambiguity and tangled thoughts.
Sakura finally gets ambitious, that's also nice. I was wondering how you would recreate the emotional shock that was Naruto's failure to bring Sasuke back in canon. Being there, and aware of what's going on (as opposed to passed out), and a helpless witness to her teammates nearly getting killed while trying to protect her, seems like an even stronger push in the direction of her deciding to train hard and become a reliable partner.
Your chatacter-building is very logical and sometimes seems almost geometrically structured, with action-reaction and levels of reverberation laid out neatly for us to read trough. The switching of povs between the main characters helps play out this display realistically, without forcing tedious explanations of character evolution. My mathematical mind approves :)
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i love how he slowly comes to realize what it is that he feels, and his mind works in concepts, not images or words. Very Sasuke-like to catch himself feeling, and to work hard on clearing out his emotions, not liking ambiguity and tangled thoughts.
Sakura finally gets ambitious, that's also nice. I was wondering how you would recreate the emotional shock that was Naruto's failure to bring Sasuke back in canon. Being there, and aware of what's going on (as opposed to passed out), and a helpless witness to her teammates nearly getting killed while trying to protect her, seems like an even stronger push in the direction of her deciding to train hard and become a reliable partner.
Your chatacter-building is very logical and sometimes seems almost geometrically structured, with action-reaction and levels of reverberation laid out neatly for us to read trough. The switching of povs between the main characters helps play out this display realistically, without forcing tedious explanations of character evolution. My mathematical mind approves :)