I'm de-lurking a bit just 'cause I'm really enjoying reading this as you post it ^___^. Neither werewolves or Gundam Wing are big things of mine - I haven't ever seen the anime, just picked some awareness of it up from overlapping fandoms - but your originally-Gundam-y werewolf story is made of shiny and awesome as far as I'm concerned. The domestic banter's fun to read, the underlying tension makes me want to see what happens next, and all the characters are interesting. (I wanted to say they were 'dynamic' - that comes across as pretentious, but the sense it contains, that they come across as having clear attitudes and relationships to one another and it reads like you're enjoying messing around with that in dialogue, while at the same time they've got long-term motivations and they're all in this house for different reasons...)
Still, I'm attempting NaNo for the first time evaaaarrr this year, and if you're writing from anything as loose a mental story-plan as me, I can see why it'd be hard to keep the story moving along and push characters into place for each scene. Good luck! :>
ps, since I picked this up right at the end of the last section, so it'd be easy to go back and fix:: "Tonight was the last night of full moon" - wants a 'the' in there, I think...
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I'm de-lurking a bit just 'cause I'm really enjoying reading this as you post it ^___^. Neither werewolves or Gundam Wing are big things of mine - I haven't ever seen the anime, just picked some awareness of it up from overlapping fandoms - but your originally-Gundam-y werewolf story is made of shiny and awesome as far as I'm concerned. The domestic banter's fun to read, the underlying tension makes me want to see what happens next, and all the characters are interesting. (I wanted to say they were 'dynamic' - that comes across as pretentious, but the sense it contains, that they come across as having clear attitudes and relationships to one another and it reads like you're enjoying messing around with that in dialogue, while at the same time they've got long-term motivations and they're all in this house for different reasons...)
Still, I'm attempting NaNo for the first time evaaaarrr this year, and if you're writing from anything as loose a mental story-plan as me, I can see why it'd be hard to keep the story moving along and push characters into place for each scene. Good luck! :>
ps, since I picked this up right at the end of the last section, so it'd be easy to go back and fix::
"Tonight was the last night of full moon" - wants a 'the' in there, I think...