ext_2976 ([identity profile] trishalynn.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] askerian 2009-09-02 10:36 pm (UTC)

I think I like that idea, having different scenes set off by different marks.

However, I think I understood it just fine and I didn't have to go back and read. The disjointed effect is really cool, and I went "A-ha!" when I read this line: He should have known the dust would attract other teams. It was like a signal flare. He should have known.

The part I didn't understand was why he had the cat.

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