I think I like that idea, having different scenes set off by different marks.
However, I think I understood it just fine and I didn't have to go back and read. The disjointed effect is really cool, and I went "A-ha!" when I read this line: He should have known the dust would attract other teams. It was like a signal flare. He should have known.
The part I didn't understand was why he had the cat.
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However, I think I understood it just fine and I didn't have to go back and read. The disjointed effect is really cool, and I went "A-ha!" when I read this line: He should have known the dust would attract other teams. It was like a signal flare. He should have known.
The part I didn't understand was why he had the cat.