Damnit. There was a typo I saw, but I figured someone else would've mentioned it, so I didn't pay much attention to it. I think it was just a case of an "ed" tacked on to verb where it wasn't needed or something. Sorry! If I get the chance, I'll reread.
I think this is a really tricky scene to work with. Tifa felt very in-character to me, and so did Zack. Above, there was a comment that Aeris was off, but I'm not too sure. I'm playing Crisis Core now, and though I wouldn't call it canon or anything, I'm picking up little things about Aeris that I never noticed before. I think here she works fine - she is the curious type, and coupled with her compassion for others, it's plausible that she'd help Sephiroth back to watch him grow. Other things I noticed, this time while replaying FFVII last week: Aeris is, like Tifa mentions in this scene, a flirt, so her side remarks are fitting. Finally, something someone pointed out to me sometime back - there are times when Aeris has shown to be somewhat selfish in FFVII. I forget the examples used, but I thought about it when Zack mentioned being selfish; in a way, both of them must be if they're going to subject the Planet to Sephiroth (again).
Anway~! This still remains my favorite fic you write so far! Some of the lines are just too awesome, and I think the fivesome dynamics are unfolding very nicely so far! Right now, I'm really anxious how Cloud's going to decide between bringing Sephiroth with him to Wutai or just not going. Poor Yuffie D:
So, loved the sleep-induced chapter and hope you write more soon!
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Damnit. There was a typo I saw, but I figured someone else would've mentioned it, so I didn't pay much attention to it. I think it was just a case of an "ed" tacked on to verb where it wasn't needed or something. Sorry! If I get the chance, I'll reread.
I think this is a really tricky scene to work with. Tifa felt very in-character to me, and so did Zack. Above, there was a comment that Aeris was off, but I'm not too sure. I'm playing Crisis Core now, and though I wouldn't call it canon or anything, I'm picking up little things about Aeris that I never noticed before. I think here she works fine - she is the curious type, and coupled with her compassion for others, it's plausible that she'd help Sephiroth back to watch him grow. Other things I noticed, this time while replaying FFVII last week: Aeris is, like Tifa mentions in this scene, a flirt, so her side remarks are fitting. Finally, something someone pointed out to me sometime back - there are times when Aeris has shown to be somewhat selfish in FFVII. I forget the examples used, but I thought about it when Zack mentioned being selfish; in a way, both of them must be if they're going to subject the Planet to Sephiroth (again).
Anway~! This still remains my favorite fic you write so far! Some of the lines are just too awesome, and I think the fivesome dynamics are unfolding very nicely so far! Right now, I'm really anxious how Cloud's going to decide between bringing Sephiroth with him to Wutai or just not going. Poor Yuffie D:
So, loved the sleep-induced chapter and hope you write more soon!