I love this fic so much. (Had to go raid your livejournal for all the scattered pieces of this part, but it was worth the search.)
"... Sakura... Can you read their lips?" Sasuke breathed with some reluctance. This part is a bit odd to me, because you have the dialogue between Jiraiya, Tsunade, and the others, and I assume Sakura can hear that because she's changing her opinion of Jiraiya. But then she can't tell what they're saying? it just confuses me a bit.
Sakura's eyebrow twitched.
"I could make a very original scene with this -- the pure, innocent maiden, unable to choose between her two handsome suitors, giving away the flower of her womanhood to --"
The bedside table hit Jiraiya's face with a satisfying thud.
"PERVERT!!!"
"... I see the wild, untamed wench would fit the theme better..."
I love that! You write Jiraiya well. ^_^ (I love that old man entirely too much.)
If it was their way to say "sorry I worried you", or even, god forbid, "I love you", she hoped they remembered that she was a girl and not a macho jerk, because if ever one of them attempted to assure her of his tender feelings by insulting her, she'd castrate them.
That bit was also adorable. So was the rest of this fic, but I'm not going to pick out every bit that made me grin; I'd end up quoting your entire fic.
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"... Sakura... Can you read their lips?" Sasuke breathed with some reluctance.
This part is a bit odd to me, because you have the dialogue between Jiraiya, Tsunade, and the others, and I assume Sakura can hear that because she's changing her opinion of Jiraiya. But then she can't tell what they're saying? it just confuses me a bit.
Sakura's eyebrow twitched.
"I could make a very original scene with this -- the pure, innocent maiden, unable to choose between her two handsome suitors, giving away the flower of her womanhood to --"
The bedside table hit Jiraiya's face with a satisfying thud.
"PERVERT!!!"
"... I see the wild, untamed wench would fit the theme better..."
I love that! You write Jiraiya well. ^_^ (I love that old man entirely too much.)
If it was their way to say "sorry I worried you", or even, god forbid, "I love you", she hoped they remembered that she was a girl and not a macho jerk, because if ever one of them attempted to assure her of his tender feelings by insulting her, she'd castrate them.
That bit was also adorable. So was the rest of this fic, but I'm not going to pick out every bit that made me grin; I'd end up quoting your entire fic.
~Sam